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for when nature calls

by leah

person Parod Vor
schedule April 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is good, but it could use some polishing and re-formatting...
person Hiedi Moon
schedule April 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hiedi: Hey. That was awesome!!!!!!! U really dont suck.
Makayla: More.....more.....more.....more....more!!!!!!!
Hiedi: Shut-up Makayla. Who said you could talk and r&r.
Makayla: sry. :(
person Hiedi Moon
schedule April 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hiedi: Hey. That was awesome!!!!!!! U really dont suck.
Makayla: More.....more.....more.....more....more!!!!!!!
Hiedi: Shut-up Makayla. Who said you could talk and r&r.
Makayla: sry. :(
person Kort
schedule February 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I liked it. Hiei and Kurama are my favorite pairing. All in all, it was a good story. Although it would have been funny if Kurama's mother had walked in.
person kittiy
schedule January 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
that was really good you have to make a seqeal!
person Angel-Sama
schedule January 8, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I'm confused.... didn't Hiei come home in the morning? so how could they do their business and go to sleep and it's still morning? They didn't take that long.... did they?
person katarica
schedule September 19, 2003 at 12:00 AM
that was fun. ^_^ The description of the lemon started slow and taunting, but suddenly sped up too quickly!
^_^ but other than the speed it was fine. very nice, in fact. ;)
person blackfire
schedule July 25, 2003 at 12:00 AM
this was great please do write a sequel
person JesPaiTha
schedule July 17, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Great story! And good lemon, please please make a sequel! *^^*
person Jennifer
schedule July 11, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Sequel please!

Save for some minor mispellings, great job!