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for Broken Luck

by mistryl

person Liz
schedule September 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oh my god i can't believe that after all this time, you left it like that Please update..
person vixenia
schedule September 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ooh now now, that last sentence was a bit naughty in a sort of sense. heh heh. me and my damn perverted mind. Anyways great chapter. update soon please. bai bai
person RChan
schedule September 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
While I rather like the concept of your fanfic, it is rather jumpy... You move from scene to scene with out explain ing how it happens or putting in a page break. That make it a little confusing and hard to follow. Also you lack much information in the ways of relationships and how people begin to feel for one another and how they get together. I like your general idea here, but it could use a little more editing.
person kit-kit
schedule September 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
nice chapter though im kind of sad that kurama has to be arrested.
person Amber
schedule August 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please update, please. This is a great story and I can't wait for the next chapter.
person Amber
schedule July 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was fantastic. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
person The Green Knight
schedule July 15, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey... I didn't mean it like that. *hugs* I was just in a Yusuke/Kurama mood for the day and looky-looky you updated!
person Evelyn
schedule July 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was... sorta sick! But dont take this as a bad review. It was good. and nicely written.
Eve
person kit-kit
schedule July 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow if only kurama knew.
person darkperfection
schedule July 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well that was kinda short but Ienjoyed it please continue*smiles*