rate_review Reviews

thanks for taking our advise and combining some of those pasky chort first chapters.

I have to admit that I'm impressed by you. Not excactly by writing skills but your ability to have the constructive criticism as it's meant to be; a means to help you improve your writing skills. I have noticed an improvement too. There are many writers who would snap and go crazy on a reviewer for says "the chapters are too short" . Instead of snaping at me you and go make longer chapters and combine the really short ones. I'm impressed by your maturity and ability to handle criticism. I may have not been polite but I never flame ^__^ I believe in giving a person the chance to improve.

For your ability to handle my negaite review and go make your story better, I am forced to give you 5 stars.

Please keep up the good work.

But don't stop improving ;)

^____^ a lemon between Hiei & Miroku whohoo! In all truth, I think the scene between those two was well done, I can't wait for them to talk, HIei will find out that the monk is not at all weak. Once Hiei finds out about the curse that aflicted Miroku's family for three generations, he will understand that Miroku knows whats it's like to be alone.

A;thouhg it caght me by surprise with the tidbit that Miroku had a prior encounter with Inuyasha. I guess Miroku and inu are both promiscous (I hope I spelled it correctly).

Hehe I loved how Sango thought of Kazuma...even calling him Kazuma-kun! I like Kazuma for the same reasons that Sango does. Poor Sango, fearing that Kazuma has a girlfriend. In this are Yukina & Kazuma only friends?? For once I'm hoping so ;)
Hehe It was humorous that Kagome thought he had a cute butt in those jeans. At first I thouhgt that was the wrong area to have Kagome to think of Yusuke, then I whacked myself,realizing that Yusuke is lanky, he doesn't have a butt XD Kagome was admitting theres one good quality for Kazuma ...right?

Ahh I'm glad that I'm hanged in there. I like the new twists. YAY! Thank you for Sango/Kuwabara. I'm glad that someone is brave enough to write one. Hiei/Miroku? Now thats also new. My guess at what's made Hiei cry is that same what has made him testy towards Kurama. He cared and/or lusted for the fox but Kurama went to yusuke.

Okay so who is Kagome going toget with eventually? We've seen her with Yusuke in a lot of stories. How about Botan?

Well, the chapters are not as short as before. They're on the small end of acceptable, but it's enough so I don't get frustrated at having to hit the next button so quikly.
Thank you for making longer chapters.
the lemon between Kurama & Inuyasha was a bit quick, but I know how hard it is to write those scenes. Hopefully with practice, they won't seem so ackward.
This is the first time I've seen Inuyasha paired with Kurama, nice surprise there.

Hoiw about another never before seen pairing? Can I be you to get Sango to flirt with Kuwabara? Maybe even get together with him? He's polite with women (called Juri sweetheart during the Tournament ;) And he respects women enough to NOT grope them. It would be a shock to Sango to have a guy nice to her maybe catch her in battle and NOT grope her.

Okay, Katzztar told me to check out the newest chapters.
I must admit that the chapters are longer than before.
The bad portrayal of Kuwabara seemed to maybe inintenional.
The lemon seemed to be rushed in the writing. However new authors often run into that problem. I know how hard it is sometimes to write a sex scene.
I don't know yet. I wiil check out some more before saying I'll give up.

There has been improvement in the last few chapters. Perhaps the first few chapters can be re-written? Is in combining a few of them to make them more acepale lenght.

You read my mind. Yes there will be a pair up between Kuwa-chan and Sango. Plus Miroku/Hiei. For better or for worse...heh.

What the?????
Dude the well isn't a demon! It's not even alive! It is revealed in the 2nd IY movie that it was built using the wood of a God Tree that existed before the current God Tree that lives from Fedual era to modern times. But as the names suggest those are GOD trees not demon trees.

The chapters are way too short. I find it annoying to have to hit the next button so often. I rather not read a story that has extremely short chapters. There are others that feel the same way. A good way not to loose readers is to make longer chapters.

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Sorry but I don't like reading stories that make Kuwabara into a sensless idiot, He may be a clown but he's not stupid. Unlike Urameshi, Kuwabra graduated from Jr.High to High school to College. Yusuke Urameshi never finnished jr high.

Kuwabra isn't a coward either. HE wouldn't be afraid to stay with the others. Nervous around Inuyasha, okay I can see that since Inuyahs gives off hostile vibes a lot. But he has the highest spirit awareness in the modern Ningenkai.Kuwabra would be able to tell that Kagome, Kaede, Sango, Shippo and Miroku are friendly.

Hi... I just read some more and I now see that there is some character development. Well, you should still lengthen out the early chapters— add some detail.

Listen though, I highly doubt that a group is going to give one single preson the evil eye. Maybe Kuwa and the his group because they're dressed differently and therefore might be considered witches or majo.

The scene between Yusuke & Kuram was sweet. But as I said the chapters are too short. I'm not going to read too much more itf they are barely a page or two.