The Aftermath

thoth_moon
Ah, it's here! Okay, I've only read Chapter 1 thus far, but I'll probably get through 10 and let you know what I think by the day's end. I cannot tell you how happy I am to see this here. I was thinking that Yusuke and Kuwabara might talk before the latter being processed. But I wonder where Hiei and Kurama--and Sabaktu, for that matter--are right now...? (*Read and find out, idiot*) ^__^

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BlueUtopiah
I have to say that I really really like your portrayal of Yomi. In fanfic, he's either a rapist or a stalker, and you've done him justice. I like that he won't take advantage of Kurama, despite Kurama's neediness, and his moment with Shura was very cute. I'm a big Yomi fan and its nice to see him written so well.

I also like how you're having Yusuke handle the repercussions. He's somewhat strong, but occasionally freaks out. And the scene with Kuwabara was sad but sweet. I just feel badly for Hiei - his son's going to die and he can't really do anything about it. Also, I hope Yusuke finds Hiei before he gives birth because what Koenma said makes me worried.

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solitare1
Boy, that fool broke them really bad. They won't ever be right again. Your story is really good and agnsty and I won't like it any other way. Be checking back for more.

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thoth_moon
Well hell, now that they're out of the dungeons you're just bringing back the entire cast, huh? I especially enjoy the presence of the other Makai Lords, whom you've personified VERY WELL. Yomi's not a vengeful rapist and Mukuro's not a bitch always wanting to jump Hiei's rod ^_^ I look forward to seeing what will happen with the situation between Yusuke and Kurama, and wonder when Hiei and Sabaktu (should he survive that long) will be brought out of isolation and back to the others.

Oh, and I need to rate after this, don't I? Well, shall do that promptly, then.

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thoth_moon
Oh, and I forgot to mention in the other review pertaining to your mention of artwork in the opening notes to Chapter 2 I would be happy to take a try at it ... but could I have a prompt to get me going?

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mhmartini
You sure didn't waste any time in posting these scenes! Yay! I really like the sequel so far, but you leave me wondering and hoping all will be well. Time will tell, I guess. Great job and please keep up the good work.

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kerryann
Wow,what a tear jerker this is starting out as.I really hope you let Kurama and Yusuke Bond somewhat here,they both need it(badly).At least my vote is for these two and not Yomi.And poor Hiei loseing His son/master,I hope they can work this out as well.It sounds like it would take Both Yusuke and Kurama to help him through this.
Wow what a great load of updates as well.You write quit well and Ilook forward to the next few chapters.

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mhmartini
Finally! I know Kurama and Yusuke have a long road ahead of them, but for the moment they seem...settled, at least. I do fear for Hiei and his son, but I also realize that Sabie's death is the only thing that can set Hiei free from under him. It really sucks for Hiei, though. I mean, within a week he found out he's a father, going to be a grandfather, going to be a father again, he was placed in a submissive position to his son, his firstborn is dying, and now he's on the lam with a dying son and quite a few buns in the oven. I hope the gang finds him and reels him in before he either gets attacked or goes self-destructive. I'm interested to see how this will play out with Yukina, too, since she's not as naive as one would think.

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solitare1
You have these characters so true to form. Yu is so dumb sometimes and never knows when to hush, good thing Kurama is back and by his side. Hope Hiei is fairing as well.

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thoth_moon
Yomi--mindfuck. But that's how he always is, no?

Shishi's sarcasm was excellent; it kept the serious tone in check with a bit of (gruff) humor, ha-ha!

And just because childbirth is present in a plot, doesn't mean one must go into all the screaming details like in soap operas and sitcoms. I mean, if one wants, go ahead, but it's not necessarily essential, and I think you pulled it just fine.

And now I wonder--I'm thinking from what's been presented so far Sabaktu's just doomed; plus if Yusuke wants to mate with Hiei also Sabaktu as alpha would be an obstacle (cold, I know, but still)--but you could still surprise us...

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kerryann
Its about time they find Hiei and his son.Yusuke as a great teacher but boy he has a lot to learn about demon world.Nice going with the way Kurama and Yusuke finally got it together.Poor Hiei still has alot to go through I fear.Very nicely done on the chapters so far and I can't wait for the next set.

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thoth_moon
Ichiro and Jiro--now I'm having "Kikaider" flashbacks XD

Well, no one's dead, yet, and they know where they are, at least. Optimistic, and at the same time ominous... Or something like that.

And I've decided: I'm going to do a sketch of our poor Sabie, since it looks like he's going to kick it, and he's in my head anyhow. So, at some point, I'll share that with you, okay? ^__^ I look forward to how the Shinobis' search goes!

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BlueUtopiah
Oh man...Hiei is just going to be a mess when Yusuke finally gets him back. The poor thing, he can just never catch a break! As much as I feel bad though, I love the Hiei torture, he's my favourite character too.

The interaction between Kurama and Yusuke is sweet but sad. They do love each other, but I can see how their love isn't as all-encompassing as it should be because they miss Hiei. And I really like how you're portraying Koenma as well. He's not just humour fodder for the show, he really is a godling and occasionally acts like one.

I look forward to this story every day. :D

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thoth_moon
Well, at least Kichiro has only marked Hiei as a possession. At first I was wondering if you'd be twisted enough to have him mark Hiei like Sabaktu was. And I was wondering, earlier, about the comment among the Shinobi about Shishi--this should prove *interesting*.

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kerryann
How could you,Poor Hiei from one evil to another.I thought Hiei suffered enough already being made to call
his own son master,how can he and his infants be freed now?I hope Yusuke Kicks some serious a-- here soon.

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thoth_moon
Hiei/Shishi. You're right; that's a very uncommon pairing, but I could see some complementary qualities between the two, so it's not entirely out of the realm of possiblity. Touya and Shishi is another one that I don't believe I've ever encountered (it seems that Shishi, when one encounters him in yaoi stories, is always paired up with Suzuka, so). So that's pretty cool that you're experimenting with this essentially unheard of pairings. Personally, I was wondering if this was where it might go after Kichiro got ahold of him, and the results should prove very--okay, I overuse this word so much someone should smack me--interesting.

And I like the irritable birthing Kurama! It's understandable and I think quite realistic. Plus maybe their record of Shishi being impregnated could help them pinpoint his and Hiei's and Sabaktu's location, and Hiei can spend more than just a chapter or two out of captivity or refuge ^__^ But I get the need to torture your favorite; there's half a dozen, at least, people around here with the Fox Torture Fetish, so why not a ... HTF? JTF? KTF? Bah, depends on what you prefer to call him. Well now, this is getting to be a lengthy review, so I'll just leave it there (don't have much else to say, anyhow). Looking forward to where this progresses, as always.

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thoth_moon
Oh--wow, I think you updated while I was reviewing, maybe, unless I missed a chapter before reviewing *shrugs* You have me a bit curious about the way that Hiei's twins are ... structured? At first I was thinking of babies like human infants, but the way they're portrayed makes them sound like they have more developed motor skills (which, not being human, I guess could make sense), like puppies or kittens or something (probably emphasized by the way their feeding is described). But, you said you'd expand on them later, so....

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thoth_moon
Oh yeah, I'd forgotten that Hiei was ... special, as a child (and he was able to cut up demons when he was what, three or so?). And I just assumed that the boys didn't get tear gems because Hiei was for the most part male.

So, Koenma *doesn't* know where they are. Hm, I'm wondering if maybe they'll have to have a repeat of Kuwabara before they'll be able to find the location. Also, I'm wondering how a certain ice apparition's going to react when he hears about what's become of Shishi, from some little things that've been dropped.

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solitare1
I am so happy for Kurama....I feel for Hiei and Yusuke and their babies.

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thoth_moon
Psychic? Hm ... well, some people in Mother's family have seen ghosts, but as for myself, I guess I'm just good at picking out the subtlest of foreshadowings or something XD

I like that they named one of the kits after Kuwabara, especially since out of the three he was closest to Yusuke and Kurama (not that he and Hiei hated each other like they pretended to, but). I'm *still* wondering about the outcome at the brothel, especially now that Shishi's been thrown in there as well, so don't make us wait too long for an update (what am I talking about? That's essentially a non-issue with you!) ^_^

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kyokohina
This store is one of the best. It be cool if yusuka got pregnant as well. Butthe pregnay inthisstory are srange I mean no one has had morng sickness or back ach ,etc i mean its like there all haveng perfect pregnancys. Does it have todo with the fact that there demans???But any way great story I look forward for more.Sorry about the spelling.

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thoth_moon
Hm--you might be right. I've seen Yomi/Kurama of course, Yomi/Mukuro, even Yomi/Shizuru and Yomi/Kaito--but I'm unsure if I've really seen a Yomi/Hiei. ^__^ But you don't portray Yomi as a self-absorbed rapacious villain, so I'm going to count on him having some sort of intuition toward this encounter that can prove beneficial for the entire family.

By the way, this is a cruel place to leave off. I go away on most weekends, including this one, so this is just going to build up until Sunday evening. If this is still the latest installment by the time I leave today, guess what I'm going to do first thing when I come back Sunday evening? ^_^

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kerryann
If I beg can Hiei get a reprive or something.How mach more can poor Hiei take without completely
loseing himself. ..Ok I'm on my knees.please let someone that can really help find them
:) Great job so far and can't wait for the next set of chapters.

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Thanks to all of these that reviewed my story during it's run. Also, thanks to all who will review in the future. Please. :o)