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for control

by lildemonicfoofoo

schedule July 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I really liked the whole concept of dominant and submissive being taken to such a level by these two. And I must congradulate you on your creative positions, lol. I, however, didn't like the 'bringing the reader into play' part of the story. It simply didn't fit well or really make all that much sense.
person lynn
schedule December 11, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I really love the way the story works out. Really great story. please write more.
schedule November 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I love how detailed it is, but some of the spelling errors and stuff take away from the story, you should get a Beta-reader, or spellchecker. But other than that, this story is SO GOOD. I love how detailed it is, and hey it's about Kurama and Hiei. Keep writing!

person Mija
schedule September 9, 2003 at 12:00 AM
ooh this was an awsome fic Im soo glad you finally finished it and it turned out soo well..:-) great fic great work..huggs Mija..:-)
person Katy
schedule September 6, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Hey, I liked your story so far!! Can you add more to it please!!! It has a great story line!!!!
person Mija
schedule September 3, 2003 at 12:00 AM
ooh that is sooooo cruel..sniffles..no like cliffy's..sigh and i bet Hiei dont like it er..hr..hehe, cant wait to read your update hope its soon..:-)
person tatoosh
schedule September 3, 2003 at 12:00 AM
A wicked tease, nicely done. Pay back can be a bitch ;)
person Anya
schedule September 1, 2003 at 12:00 AM
It's good. But I can't belieive you had Hiei asleep the whole chapter - not fair!!!! :(
Do for forget to continue!!! :>
person JesPaiTha
schedule August 28, 2003 at 12:00 AM
*claps* VERY good! I loved it, please continue!
person JesPaiTha
schedule August 21, 2003 at 12:00 AM
That was so good! Oh Gods you gotta continue! You got me all horny now. LOL