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Oh, definitely an interesting turn.
I apologize for my earlier review. I asked if your story might be mislabeled because you said it was complete so I thought it was a one-shot. I misunderstood and now realize that it's a chaptered story.
Your grammar is still impeccable and I liked Kurama and his mother trying to teach Yusuke manners even if they went about it the wrong way. I look forward to reading more.

Wow, did not see that coming! Poor Yusuke.

Ah, I see what you mean now~ :)

Poor Yusuke, always screwing up and never knowing how to go about it. -comforts- Makes me wonder where he ran off to and what he did to get the cash. I feel sorry for him and just think he deserves some love. >_< Who could have poisoned him, I wonder. ooooooh, can't wait to read the next chapter now. XD -flails about-

Again, easy to read, good detail; you clearly get what you are trying to portray across. It's a pleasure to read.

oooh this was a definite hook chapter!
I'm am now dying to know what happened to Yusuke!
...Though I so would have killed him for pelting me with pebbles...
and that god awful singing...but I can so see him doing that!
Can't wait for the update!

Aw,poor Yuusuke! I wonder what happened to him that he got poisoned and his back is pulverized. I'm glad he had the honor at least to make the money on his own and not ask Kurama for the money to talk to Kurama. I wonder how Kurama thought that would work anyway, but I'm glad Yuusuke has learned a little something, though I hope it isn't tarnished by the unfortunate consequences of his righteous actions.

If you're still in need of a beta, I'd love to help. (Donnabeth89@hotmail.com) Either way, I can't wait to see more of this story, it's very promising so far.

ahhh! Please don't stop there! I can't handle the wait! Please update soon!

-Till Then!

Hey send me an email if your still looking for a Beta. Its always nice to see someone willing to make their story better. Also be sure you tell me everything about the story, pairing (even though I can guess) in the format of semexuke. Hoping to hear from you soon.

Hunter

just realized that my email didn't show up in my previous review. Its yothatsillogical@rocketmail.com

You don't really have anything wrong with your grammar. It seems pretty good to me. As a side note, is that all or are there more chapters? I like the concept and think more can be done with it, but that's all you. I liked this bit and am happy to see the lyrics at the end instead of mixed up in the story disrupting it and all. :)

I liked it. Your grammar was great so you don't really need a beta. However, if your story is complete, perhaps it was mislabeled? You put Anal, Fingering, H/C, HJ, M/M, Rim, Yaoi as your tags but there wasn't much here except shounen-ai.