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April 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I usually don't make it a habit to read Hiei and any woman stories, but this one the way it's set up and the way he can't get out of it lest the women die.....genius, pure genius. You know I love your script writing and have every since The True Purpose(still waiting for a sequel). Bravo!
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April 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Well I have to admit that at first I wasn't sure how I would like reading your writing style. (I am insainly picky) But the quality of your story more then made up my mind for me. I realy like it! And of course anytime Hiei comes out on top is a huge plus in my books.
Now I jut can't wait to see who comes looking for him, Kurama or Yusuke, and what they will think of the situation and if Hiei will treat them the same way he always has.
Well before I start babbling more, I just want to say, good job, and I hope to see more soon.
Legilmyth
Now I jut can't wait to see who comes looking for him, Kurama or Yusuke, and what they will think of the situation and if Hiei will treat them the same way he always has.
Well before I start babbling more, I just want to say, good job, and I hope to see more soon.
Legilmyth
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April 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
i have read so many different stories that i ended up with quite the number of favorties. this has been added to my list!
miko
miko
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April 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
chap 9!
thank u so muchfor updating it is while worth the wait! ^^ hiei seems more at ease now which is a very good thing! GREAT CHAPTER I LOVE IT! THIS IS SUCH AN AMAZING STORY AND CHAPTER!
thank u so muchfor updating it is while worth the wait! ^^ hiei seems more at ease now which is a very good thing! GREAT CHAPTER I LOVE IT! THIS IS SUCH AN AMAZING STORY AND CHAPTER!
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April 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
hm interesting! i hope hiei will be submissive later on in this story at least once or twice! i hope some of the demonesess and the female human get preg nome time in this story or in the equel of this story if there is one. PLZ MAKE MORE CHAPTERS SOON! ILL BE WAITING! I LOVE THIS STORY ALOT SO PLZ UPDATE SOON!
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April 9, 2009 at 12:00 AM
First off, I would like to say that I love this idea to death! I read the summary and your author's note at the beginning and I was sold! Kudo's to you!
But I'm sorry to say that it's not very well written. It's actually pretty darn bad. Putting a character in a sexual situation always requires some sort of OOCness, but you're way over-doing it. It's not Hiei anymore! Besides that, this isn't even a proper story, this is a script. You probably have this idea, quickly put it to paper before the idea was gone from your mind, but didn't take the time to edit what you wrote. It's like you didn't even make an effort!
I'm not trying to be mean, I'm giving you feedback.
But I'm sorry to say that it's not very well written. It's actually pretty darn bad. Putting a character in a sexual situation always requires some sort of OOCness, but you're way over-doing it. It's not Hiei anymore! Besides that, this isn't even a proper story, this is a script. You probably have this idea, quickly put it to paper before the idea was gone from your mind, but didn't take the time to edit what you wrote. It's like you didn't even make an effort!
I'm not trying to be mean, I'm giving you feedback.
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April 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This is really good. I had more or less expected one-shots with no plot but this is great^_^ I hope that Hiei in later chapters will be on the bottom, though I like him as the dominant partner, and have difficulties with seeing him as anything else, I simply love Hiei as the submissive partner:P
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April 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Now this story I think I can get into!! Really interesting like you Inu story.