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August 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hey~! Great job on Hiei's harem! I just finished reading the first part (lol took me several hours, but I just couldn't stop reading it ha ha) I only have one suggestion to make.
For me, personally, I had a little bit of difficulty trying to figure out what certain things meant. Such as when Hiei and Sarista would talk, and they would guess what the other was thinking, thus, neither one of them would finish their sentences. (If I could remember what chapter the particular part was that I'm thinking of was in, I would quote it, but alas, I am yet to sleep today so it escapes me) So maybe, on the places where it makes sense for the characters to be vague towards each other, maybe if you could elaborate a little more for the sake of the readers? I understand that you're finished with this series, but for future stories you might write. Other than that I have no qualms. =D
In any case, I absolutely adore the story thus far (Your version of Hiei is sooooo freaking close to my own version, it's a little scary ha ha) And as such, you have really put me in the mood to draw lol
Have you drawn any of these wonderful characters that you've created/has anyone drawn them for you?
I'd like to draw them for you, as a sign of my appreciation of your absolute brilliance!! But of course, I request your permission first, as they are your characters after all. ;)
If you're interested, my DeviantArt account username is same as here: nukumi-kun. If you have an account there, feel free to contact me there. If not but you're still interested, well, I'm easily accessed here too lol
Anyway, sorry to bore you with a horrendously LONG review, but I love your story, thank you so much for sharing it with us!! <3
Im off to read the next part now~! <3
~nukumi-kun
For me, personally, I had a little bit of difficulty trying to figure out what certain things meant. Such as when Hiei and Sarista would talk, and they would guess what the other was thinking, thus, neither one of them would finish their sentences. (If I could remember what chapter the particular part was that I'm thinking of was in, I would quote it, but alas, I am yet to sleep today so it escapes me) So maybe, on the places where it makes sense for the characters to be vague towards each other, maybe if you could elaborate a little more for the sake of the readers? I understand that you're finished with this series, but for future stories you might write. Other than that I have no qualms. =D
In any case, I absolutely adore the story thus far (Your version of Hiei is sooooo freaking close to my own version, it's a little scary ha ha) And as such, you have really put me in the mood to draw lol
Have you drawn any of these wonderful characters that you've created/has anyone drawn them for you?
I'd like to draw them for you, as a sign of my appreciation of your absolute brilliance!! But of course, I request your permission first, as they are your characters after all. ;)
If you're interested, my DeviantArt account username is same as here: nukumi-kun. If you have an account there, feel free to contact me there. If not but you're still interested, well, I'm easily accessed here too lol
Anyway, sorry to bore you with a horrendously LONG review, but I love your story, thank you so much for sharing it with us!! <3
Im off to read the next part now~! <3
~nukumi-kun
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May 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Well shit has hit the fan. Just when poor Hiei thought he couls start to relaxe. LOL
Well, now switching to the seuel, keep up the great work.
Legilmyth
Well, now switching to the seuel, keep up the great work.
Legilmyth
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May 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
As usually great chapter^_^ If you feel like then split it up, but it's not like it will make that much of a difference to me, I'm still going to read it all^_^
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May 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
chap 28!
poor D'Tara and gamaru! they hold alot of greif! GREAT CHAPTER I LOVE IT! FANTASTIC JOB!
poor D'Tara and gamaru! they hold alot of greif! GREAT CHAPTER I LOVE IT! FANTASTIC JOB!
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May 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
poor hiei at least lilly is trying to help him! GREAT CHAPTER! I LOVE IT!
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May 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I say break it into two parts. That way we get two long stories instead of one.
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May 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
chap 25
hm interesting! pretty much every is marked now! I LOVE IT! ITS BLOODY FUCKINGTASTIC! U ARE SUCH A GREAT WRITER!
hm interesting! pretty much every is marked now! I LOVE IT! ITS BLOODY FUCKINGTASTIC! U ARE SUCH A GREAT WRITER!
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May 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
oo sex! yay! he claims troi! GREAT CHAPTER I AM IN LOVE WITH IT AND THIS STORY! THIS IS ONE OF THE FEW STORIES THAT I CAN HANDLE HIEI BEING WITH FEMALES!
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May 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
hm to me it doesnt matter if u make sequels as but i think it will be easier for me and mabey to some other if u make sequels!^^ but please keep going with it!
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May 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
cahpter 24!
hm interesting! hiei finally marks trinka eh! GREAT CHAPTER I LOVE IT! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE I'M BEGGING U ON MY HANDS AND KNEES TO MAKE MORE CHAPTERS SOON! I'LL BE WAITING!
hm interesting! hiei finally marks trinka eh! GREAT CHAPTER I LOVE IT! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE I'M BEGGING U ON MY HANDS AND KNEES TO MAKE MORE CHAPTERS SOON! I'LL BE WAITING!