rate_review Reviews

Really good story! A real page-turner. A rather quick and bland way of writing, but there is so much potential to this already good story. Good, but not amazing, not yet. Like i said, great potential. I can see that you've grown even through the process of writing. Comparing chapter 6/7 to chapter 10, there is such a difference in writing level that it's awe-inspiring.
If my vote counts, I'd say a happy ending, since sad endings make me feel like the story isnt finished, or the author(ess) took the easy way out. Unless it's almost PERFECTLY written, then it should be happy. I've only found one perfect sad story so far out of three years on this site. ([i sried so hard at it, it was embarrassing]) So, since you haven't quite reached your full potential, i'd make it happy.

i really do love this chapter...poor hiei! but i wish you wre able to update faster...it seems as if you keep getting slowr and slower.

i do love your story and even though kurama is not so good in here... i really can't just hate him... really... though i must admit i'm begining to wonder what will be in this story... as much as i like angst and i myself wrote in the same manner with blood and violence and stuff, personally i don't like sad or tragedy... heheh... besides i do love the characters to be just themselves... in other words, i hate OOCness.... not that much but enough to make me stop reading once it become to much for me... and i must say, kurama is so OOC here... it's not yet overwhelming but still threatening.... and besides, i really, personaly don't think kurama could fall in love and considered being mated with a ningen no matter how much he respect the race... and also, i hate the fact that he considered cheating on his "belove" wife by proposing to hiei or making hiei his mistress... to think that he said he do "love" here? which to his fury, made hiei blind? i really couldn't find the logic of that...

I struggled with myself about whether or not to write this, but I like the story too much not to do so. When I read the first chapters of the story, I thought it was an excellent premise and plotline that would start out with good H/K angst and then lead into a romance between them.

However, the last chapter and this one seem to me to have taken that very premise and turned it into a 'how much of a cruel bastard can Kurama be made into and how much torture/hurt can be heaped onto Hiei', and I have to say, neither of these seems to fit the story.

Kurama is nothing if not rational, even when his emotional human side takes control. So to see him get angry at Hiei and vent his rage against Hiei for a decision that Kurama himself made (because deep down, as I believe was stated in an earlier chapter, he has feelings for the fire demon) makes absolutely no sense to this reader. Then, too, Hiei's mute acceptance of Kurama's rage seems not in keeping at all with his character -- regardless of whether he loves the fox or not. I don't believe he'd just sit silently by and let Kurama take that anger out on him... he definitely fight back.

I hope that some sensible resolution will be coming in the future because I truly believe this is an excellent story and has the potential to continue to be so. I just feel that these two chapters have gotten it off track.

Alright!

I was a little sad about the last part but this one makes up for it! I love this new direction and can't wait to see how everything plays out. Please keep writing :D

That was... I can't ..... Oh my goodness!!! That was so twisted yet sooo needed! I couldn't believe that everything that kurama did in the last chappie wouldn't have consquences. I love angst it is what drives my reading/writing! I can't wait for hiei and kurama to have conversation over everything that happened. More please!! You are awesome!!!

Even though he's pissed, I'm glad Kurama accepted their mating. Now they need to learn to love and trust. Update soon.

ooooo~ update soon pretty please~ I wanna see what happens! Pleasedon't make it a sad ending though I hate sad endings...they make me cry.....I hope everything works out I wanna see a good ending pretty pretty please

Okay.. so after read your a.n. i started the chapter and it was about kurama's honeymoon and I was like how is this helping me see that hiei isn't the only victim? But I kept reading and I love it!!! Totally awesome and even better yet it could meant a happy ending!!! I love that kurama is willing to drop everything for hiei and destory what he had!! More please!!! There I wrote a really long review for you....or at least by my standards

You had me worried about Kurama's choice when he got home so I'm glad you didn't dissapoint. Kurama made some tough choices but I'm happy to see he put his loyalties where they were deserved. It's sad about the baby, I hope Kurama never resents Hiei for that loss. Update soon.