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Yay update! -grins- Yusuke is in for it with Kurama! I can't wait to read more, please update soon ^_^

-till then!

Freakin awesome story :) Will there be more? It'd be interesting to see what goes on with that contract and all :P

I came back to reread your older fic and found this :) am soooo happy. I love it so far. I really really really hope you decide to continue!!! You will won't you???

So what about the next 4 chapters

I love your work. All of it. And this was great. I can't wait for the next part!

I really want to see Yusuke's reaction when he finds out Kurama intends to "keep" him. Please update!

XD

love it

keep up the good work

I like it. I don't dislike it. It doesn't need any more improvements, just more chapters. There. I said it. Exactly like you wanted.
No, really. It's great. I seldom read YYH stories because there are seldom any new ones. But I'm definitely glad I found this one, it's really great. Thank you and have fun writing.

S.

Wow. I haven't been on aff for about eight or nine months. Imagine my surprise when I logged on to see that you added the third chapter to "What I Steal... I keep"? ^^ As glad as I am that you've updated, I am a bit confused. Though your breaks (for time and setting changes) are obviously, the turn you take is not always so. You tend to jump around a lot. And while your topics generally become... relevant to the fic, it becomes so in a round about way. For example: The talk about the re-introduction of yokai into society was applicable to this chapter, but it might have been a little easier to speak of in the beginning of the story (like when Yusuke had gone to the party and exuded a demonic aura. Who says that that situation couldn't be molded so his demonic ancestry was more obvious/seen or aptly felt by the humans there?) . It seemed as if the world was ignorant (along with the Yukimuras, Yusuke's mother and Kurama's family) of the yokai and their overall existence for the first two chapters. You even referenced Hiei as a "boy" being "caught naked" in Kurama's bedroom by his mother in the last chapter. Why else would you do so unless you'd recently made the decision to integrate demons into society when writing the third chapter? Just make it more cohesive and seem more planned. That's my suggestion.

I do have a question pertaining to Kurama's step father and his family. Why is it that the father's have American and (in the case of his uncle's name) Christian names - e.g.: Harold and Abraham - and the children have Japanese names while their surnames are Japanese? I know many cultures pick "Americanized" names for idiotic English speakers since most of us can't pronounce anything not in English, but they aren't in a business meeting, nor speaking English. So why the names?

Other than that and the sudden, yet not-so-unexpected, but still completely random appearance of Choko, great chapter. I look forward to more soon.

Hope all's well on your side of the computer! *hands you a cookie* JA MATA~!

~Animefreak242
aka
Kawaii Girl

Love it so far. I like how this story isn't fast passed. Every event flows into another. I look forward to reading more!