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by psycicfox

person Saiou-chan
schedule December 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Woooooooo, Yusuke's having triplets!
person rayne
schedule December 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hmm... I'm liking this story. Very interesting! I can't wait for an update!
person Hi There
schedule December 27, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Its sweet, plz continue
schedule December 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Okay, surprisingly this is pretty interesting. Usually, Mpregs are not my cup of tea, but fortunately, Yusuke is ^_^ I'm curious to see how this all unfolds. Keep up the good work.
person kerbear
schedule December 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is a great start and I can't wait to see where you take this.
schedule December 25, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Overall, I think that you did a great job. I like the story and it should be interesting to see yusuke out of his normal kick-ass characteization with the way you portray his pregnancy zapping most of his powers. This could lead to some sticky situations. I did notice some grammar mistakes that interrupted reading (i.e. having to go back a re-read a sentence to make sense of it), but that is easily fixed with a beta. I look forward to the next chapter!