rate_review Reviews

i can't wait for the next chapter.

Holy god is this good. You have a nice flair for the recap without sounding redundant, and you weaved the changed plot through the actual anime so well, I felt like I was watching the show. Everyone was held nicely in character, and the lemon was amazingly detailed and hot. You really have a gift. And I like how you presented Keiko, it's hard in yaoi to find fics that don't bash Keiko, because that's the easy way out.

Again, the lemon was incredible. I like how experienced Kurama was, yet he was still swept up in Yusuke's enthusiasm. And Kuwabara walking in on them? Classic. I'm looking forward to the Yusuke/Hiei chapter next, and take your time, I understand about updating. When you write this well, it takes time.

Huzzah.

Very, very good! I loved the dialogue and the bouts of introspectiveness Yusuke displayed. The characters pretty much stayed 'in-character' throughout your story.

Excellent job!

It's about time Yusuke gets some of Kurama.

Grate start!!!! I can’t wait to read the next chapter so keep on writing and UPDATE SOON.

I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter too, although, for me, there was too much word for word re-cap of the episode. But that's just me, lol. I would have preferred Yusuke's thoughts while watching Kurama fight, or a summarized re-cap. However! As soon as you added your own spin and originality I was swept away. The lemon was as hot as they come. I loved the desperation Yusuke felt and his total lack of experience and knowledge of what was happening to him. And, even more so, was Kurama then taking charge to "help" Yusuke out, lol. But, the most lovely twist, was even though Yusuke was inexperienced, you had Kurama bottome. That was priceless and unexpected. And the way you weaved the lemon was so real and plausible and believable. You really have outdone yourself. I also appreciated that you didn't take the easy way out and simply bashed Keiko. You handled her perfectly. I'm looking forward to the Hiei/Yusuke chapter so much. Nicely done.

Great fic! Don't worry about using diologue from the anime, it's not that bad a thing to do (and I've seen it used in worse ways). I hope you don't take to long to update because damn I just gotta have more!