rate_review Reviews

PLEASE UPDATE.

man, those dreams of his sure are sumthin'. i love the way hiei kept nudging kurama, trying to tell him gently but when he finally got his message across... to see the look on kurama's face. anyway i look foward to your next update. i cant wait to see poor yusuke get some help with his 'problem'.

You're still going strong, girl! I like your explanation of Raizen and Yusuke's species' mating habits, very inventive. Plus everyone's still IC. GO YOU!

Please send me an email when you update this story.

*tears like niagra falls* WHY?!! OH GOD WHY SUCH A CLIFFHANGER!!??!!! HOW CRUEL AN AUTHOR YOU ARE! CRUEL CRUEL /CRUUUUUUUEL/!!!! T-T

Raizen never liked his heat cycle, either- preferred to run and exhaust his body so completely he couldn’t fuck if the bitch sat on him and did everything herself.

That was the line that made me sporfle and choke on a tater tot. I BLAME YOU. Overall, a very good chapter. I like how Hiei and Kurama's bond is such that Hiei wants to help, but goes to Kurama to get clearance before he proceeds. Not really ownership, more like respect, and you illustrated that well. I want to pop Hokeshin one though for not realizing that Yusuke wouldn't know about his heat cycle. I mean, sheesh! the boy used to be human, do some thinking Hokeshin! And I can't wait for Hiei to help Yusuke with his problem.

And BTW, I loved the dream sequences. So gorey and vivid and wonderfully written.

A minor critique: The correct spelling of Yusuke's demon species is Mazoku and Mukuro's name is spelled, yeah, the way I just spelled it. *grins sheepishly*

why did hiei leave? did i miss something obvious?

I love how you've written this. Very well done. I kinda wish that you'd have Yusuke bottom at least once. THAT would be hot!

I really liked this chapter. There were a few spelling errors for the characters' names, though. But it wasn't so bad as to pull me out of the fic. Your characterization was excellent as always.

And yeah, your view on Sensui is pretty much IC. He's either gay as hell (with Itsuki and perhaps sleeping around with his team) or completely asexual, depending on how you interpret canon.

See...that's the way the series should have ended: Yusuke stays in Makai, Kurama tells his mother and lives as a liason between human and demon worlds, Hiei and Kurama start a relationship. Something about this chapter just left me feeling warm despite the Yusuke angst. And I wouldn't really call it angst - you presented Yusuke and the issues he had without overdoing it or making it OMGDRAMA. I liked the way you wrote this - Yusuke is having issues with his power and Hiei/Kurama's relationship, and he withdraws or tries to forget about it by overworking his body. That's a common way people deal with problems. I also loved the chnages you made in Yusuke's physical appearance, and the way you had Hiei and Kurama begin their relationship - no fanfare, just an offering and an acceptance.

You really tied up a lot of loose ends with this chapter, if only the anime writers took a page from your book. That's why I love fanfiction - the Makai Tournament was sloppy at best and fanfic writers clean up the mistakes and - in your case - give the reader some kind of closure that we can be satisfied with. I really enjoyed this chapter and I can't wait for the lemon - that's gonna be crazy!