rate_review Reviews

You are a wonderful writer. Never think otherwise. I find your story extremely enjoyable, and you should be proud of yourself. I also seem to link quite well with the characters, which caused me to stop reading in the middle of chapters... for... reasons... um, anyway, that's a complement. So Thank you!

klv

PLease please please please please please please please please please update! i love your story so much and i really want to know what's going to happen next!

Ok, I know that critique isn't always nice, hopefully mine is nice enough. I love your OC's, Kurama makes for a surprisingly awesome bastard, and Yusuke really is that dumb 'on purpose' in the manga. But, and I do not know any other way to put this....BDSM is Not for the faint at heart. You did a good job portraying it, for a virgin...that shows you did some 'homework' on it. However, some 'Masters' do not force as...openly...as that. Mind games are often involved, tricks and schemes so to speak. I knew someone who was a 'slave' in such a relationship, and she told me, 'Master does not force me outright to do things, but that's because I'm his favorite pet, and so he often hints around...then lets me decide.' That's trickery in my book, and wouldn't you agree? I would also like to comment about your habit of calling readers and reviewers 'kittens'...Nice Touch, Hun. That's actually rather charming and not something 'Masters' often do. However, you are not my 'Master' for I listen only to myself, and I am my only boss. That's right, I'm Dominant, an Alpha Female, and I have my own pack. I may be reading/reviewing your story, but that does not give you any Real hold over me. But you may call me 'Shadow Kytten', if you wish. I will not say, 'please' I choose to instead say, 'Keep on Keeping on.'

Chapter 18 needs fixed at the bottom. :o)

Yay! I loved your new chapters as everything really starts to come together. Can't wait to see how those few last loose ends pull together!

Yay! you updated! I love this story please keep up the good work (especially with your foreshadowing ~_^

Oh my god now it's sadistic and hot you're killing me here(But in a good way might i add :)

I'm not sure if it's sweet anymore, maybe just spicy and sadistic

We shall find out?!

i cannot wait till the next one, keep on trucking

Oh come on now girl! I finally got the time/internet to finish reading this and you haven't updated for a little while.... Talk about the ultimate cliffhanger..
Obviously, I like. Took a little while for me to try and get used to your "version" of Kurama, but I'm okay with him now. :P
I must say, I'm curious as to where this is headed, for sure.
And aside from a few small errors here and there, you caught me. Hook line and sinker. VERY nice work hun.

-Thi Luna
aka. The Moon Child (for now at least)

this is like my favorite story ever it's like sweet and spicy kinda hope to see an update soon... peace-->

It's a pretty good idea, and I think I have some of it figured out already. >< Bad me. There's just a few tiny things that I found wrong. Mostly grammar and spelling issues, and a tendecy to bounce between past tense and present tense. Other than that, I liked it. Hope to see more soon!!!