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May 6, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Wow. You made me blush, you naughty thing. Looking forward to reading on through your work.
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December 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I liked the story well enough. I know I have read it before, but I don't know if I reviewed it the last time it was posted.
What I can say aside from liking the story line was that there are a lot of typos and grammatical errors. For instance, you have written Hieis and Kuramas instead of Hiei's and Kurama's. There were also a few sentences that were missing capital letters for their starts. Another thing that I noticed was the occasional his instead of he or h instead of he and the like. I have done this myself when writing. The brain is just working faster than the hands are typing. I recommend either getting a beta or waiting a week or two and then re-reading the story aloud. It will slow your brain down enough for you to possibly catch any errors.
I am sorry this was so drawn out, but I hope it helps.
What I can say aside from liking the story line was that there are a lot of typos and grammatical errors. For instance, you have written Hieis and Kuramas instead of Hiei's and Kurama's. There were also a few sentences that were missing capital letters for their starts. Another thing that I noticed was the occasional his instead of he or h instead of he and the like. I have done this myself when writing. The brain is just working faster than the hands are typing. I recommend either getting a beta or waiting a week or two and then re-reading the story aloud. It will slow your brain down enough for you to possibly catch any errors.
I am sorry this was so drawn out, but I hope it helps.
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December 25, 2006 at 12:00 AM
You know that feeling of de ja vous when you read a story. I knew I liked this but wasn't it longer? LOL