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Aww Baby!!! how cute i can't wait to see how they take it. I hope Kurama gets better soon. Humm i see babay in kuwaurameshi family

love it cant wait for the next chapter hurry please


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Good chap Jax is cute and what a sad story. Can't to read more

i love it i love it I LOVE IT. i mean it if you were to ever stop writing this i think i'd kill my self. usually im not so in to the one with kids unless there like teens or fully grown, but with this one i just can't help myself. so thank you for desiding to write this :)

WoW good chapy i wanna read more keep updateing. I's funny how jax idolizes Hiei. Aww and Kira is so cute, Rami is cute.

yaaayyy:) im so glad that you will be writing more.i think the kids are so cute especially the two kits.

::Sobs:: Okay I'm a big dork but I had to break out the tissues by the end of this chapter it was so beautiful. I can't wait to see what happens next. Don't let people who are too picky ruin your joy hun, your stories are awesome, and I think very well done. I can't wait to see Shiroi's reaction I think that shall be quite interesting, and hmmm... was that a hint of something at the end of the chapter that I noticed? The way their lovemaking seemed different, makes me think of the information we found out in the last story. If I'm right I think I just heard baby chimes in the background of their cries during climax. We'll see... for now I look forward to the next update.

There were a few mistakes that needed to be fixed like when Kurama called Kira an angel you misspelled it and spelled 'angle' instead. Also you put some of the words in present tense and then had the rest in past tense. In the future read over your chapters before you publish them to make sure they make sense or even sound okay before you post it. Or, if you don't know if you can, have someone BETA it for you. Email them any chapters you have done and are planning on posting, so that they can read it over and fix any of the mistakes you might have missed. This is a good idea because that way the story is more enjoyable and makes a lot more sense.

Also, maybe from now on you should make your chapters a combination of two chapters that way there's more to read for everyone who like World's Apart, because I know that I loved World's Apart. I would definitely like to see more of this story and would love to know what happens in the end. Anyways, try and find someone to look over it for you. In your next chapter advertise for someone who can read it over and fix your mistakes if you make any. I’m sure there would be someone willing to check your mistakes out. I would even be happy to do it if you wanted someone to.

Anyways finally, good job on this sequel so far. It has a really good plot idea and I think this story is cute so far.

that was great. please write more. i thought it was so cute and heart warming.

YAY! I am so glad you decided to put this up! I really like how the entire thing was handled between Kurama finding Rami and then the others, and I'm proud of Hiei and the way he dealt with Jax. I only saw one spelling probably and that was the word Angel from where Kurama called her "Little Angle". That's all I noticed that needs to be fixed. I really like this, and I can't help but to wonder if Hiei's relenting and letting Kurama keep the kids because of his own past having know what it's like to be alone in the world at such a young age. I look forward to the next chapter and I do hope you release it soon. Keep up the awesome work I love your stories!