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again great chapter just like the last ones. oh and even though many might thinnk this was filler, i agree that it was needed so shiori could understand better that her grandchildren are not human and that if she kept her hold onto that fact her ties with her demon family would have ended in that instant kaihei drew his weapon. luv the ending, seems toushi likes to cuddle just lik hiei XD cant wait to read more

ok first of all i agree with u in saying that u have a right to say or write what u want. its a free country and basically anything goes in this day and age. and i also i will come to your defence if anyone out there still thinks u r wrong for this. in this chapter the situation that they were in were not dire yet crucial to the development of how the kits relationship would have turned out. also, if they did not have their parents their to guide them, things could have been far worse than wat u have wrote. also everyone will agree that incest is morally wronge, however ppl have to remember that toushi and kaihei are not blood related, simply brothers by circumstance and that wat they did wasn't exactly wrong if u view if from that perspective. however i will say that it was a disturbing to read becuz we read this story and seen these boys grows even if they are fictional characters so to see them do something as adult as that is just i don't know but yeah. the chapter was good and all i have left to say is shiori is gonna give them hell times infinity. XD

Well, that's one way to distract them from the pain. I don' think anyone should flame you for this, you explained early on that Hiei and Kurama were grooming them to mate so it was bound to happen eventually. It's understandable that Shiori will be upset though, I can't wait for her to blow her top, that should be cute. Update soon.

This will probably sound like an insult, but this chapter reminds me of A Brave New World, which is probably on of the worst books in the world. But I can imagine how good the next chapter will be.

Wow,though the last chapter was a bit(alot)racey it was still very good and written quit well.Yes,I believe that both Kaihei and Toushi are very young to start that part of their relationship its where you were heading with it anyway.I can't wait to see yet cringe at Shiori's reaction to what happen.Although It could be turned back on her so that we can find out whats going on with her as well.
Alittle out there but very well done.

Hmm, where to start. I read your notes at the end of the chapter regarding sexuality and they were absolutely accurate. I was lucky enough to have a very liberal-minded teacher when we discussed sexuality in school, and we did talk about babies touching themselves and sexuality not being limited to a certain age of time of life. So if anyone flames you for those points, they need to go learn better.

About what happened between the boys, there was lead up to this. The nicknames, the comfort of each other's touches. I recall in a previous chapter that they were caught touching each other, and the whole bathing thing in the cave gave ample warning that this may happen.

I also see demon world (as fictional as it may be) having far different morals than human world. It's not a lack of morals; it is a different set of them. It's the same difference that makes having more than one wife unfathomable to some groups and having a harem of wives a sign of power and prestige in other groups. So since this world is fictional, you really can go anywhere you choose. Since you already disclaimed that you do not consider it appropriate, there's no reason to think you are a deviant.

As for writing it as you did - that is difficult to do. But you stayed true to your creation without censoring yourself, and that takes a lot of guts. Not for facing the people who may disagree or disapprove, but for actually writing the words that are in your head. I know that's the hardest part; I have been there. But I think you should be very satisfied with yourself and your chapter, and proud of your resolve. We don't always write things that we enjoy, but going outside of that "comfort zone" makes us better writers and more versatile. I applaud you for staying true to yourself.

While I did not see the chapter as "hot" (it's not my thing, either) it is a pivotal point in the plot, it was very well constructed, it explored something that you wove into the story very believably, and I cannot wait to see what Shiori has to say to her son and his mate.

Sweetheart you don't need to explain a thing. This is your story and you can do whatever it is you want with it. You warned people and if they didn't heed the warning that's their problem. I personally thought it was beautifully written. It wasn't child smut it was love between two boys, age doesn't make a difference, espically when you are dealing with Demon children running amuck in your imagination and no where else! You take your story where you see fit and I will continue reading cause I love the way its going!

Oh wow,what a chapter the last one turned out to be.How great would it be for Shori to have a demon lover/mate.I can't wait for both Hiei and Kurama to get out of her whats been going on at her home.You could just imagine both her grandsons hearing about it being bad and thinking their protecting her hurt Kurama's step dad.Her new playmate Big J would/could be fun for her I can't wait for the next chapter

What an interesting chapter I can't wait to see when exactly the kits would get together and what the new babies would look like. Only three more months in the story... Can't wait!!

Update soon please!

Ja ne!

Snow

Great update. I loved it that Shiori is considered desirable in Makai. I hope Kurama gets her away from Kazuya before something bad happens. Can't wait for the kits either. Update soon.