rate_review Reviews

I did enjoy this! This was really good, especially since it was your first try! And you still managed to bring your great style of writing out while doing the lemon. Everything was written beautifully. Wonderful job!

Hee hee, glad I managaed to track you over here now. ^_^

OH MY GOD. Are you serious when you say that's the FIRST lemon you've ever written? Because it's friggin beautiful. Jeez, if that's what the first lemon is like, I can't wait to see what you're writing in a year, it's gonna blow my mind.

So - the haiku - I woke up this morning and still had it in my head. I know I've read it before in your LJ, but IN the story it had a more vibrant life.

Oh yeah, and the lemon was hot too. *Grabs fan*

Duh, and I didn't thank you for the dedication. That was very sweet and it made my week.

That...wow...better than my first, I think. I'm glad I had time to read it today. Very nicely done. *hugs*

I loved your smorgasbord of words- I think you used one or two that I have never even heard of prior to reading this! I loved your line comparing Kurama's waking up to the exotic flower under the sun; I found it very much poetic.

I think you are wrong when you call this an "attempt" at a lemon. In my opinion, this, friend, was well-written, full-fledged, damn good erotica (not to be confused with smut, mind you)! No "attempt" about it.

Ooooo... now this was hot... good and hot... and I like the mystery behind the secret. I am about to go and run to read the other fic, cause I'm about as nosy as Kurama when it comes to things being a secret and I wanna know. Awesome job!

Wooo, hot! I think it was great! Our demons do like their distractions, don't they? (Not to mention how distracted I'll be for the next few days with that lovely imagery in my head!)

I am so flattered by your author note introduction, I cannot even begin to express it! Thank you so much.

I love the way you incorporated your haiku into the story. It was so appropriate. As I've said before, I have no skill at haiku, and seeing you integrate your impressive skill in the story format gives the story a piece of you that brings it more to life. Very nicely done.

Now if you'll excuse me, I need to play the part of the voyeur and reread that... I really, really enjoyed it. (Sounds like Hiei and Kurama did, too.)

One warning: writing lemons is addictive. Don't be surprised if you find yourself writing more and more. And don't be surprised if you find us waiting rabidly for more and more!

After some roaming, I managed to find this little treasure. And what a treasure it is. May I say that, for your first attempt, it was quite stunning. Your narrativeb as always, is completely beautiful and the actual 'lemon' protion was equally well written. I for one can appreciate the lack of crude language fully, as it deters from the reading. For as much time as you spent on this, and the effort you expended, I must say that it came out to be simply... awesome. (Blunt, but true).

Congratulations and may you write on!

Blackrose

I thought if fucking kicked ass! >8D Awsome Fic!

Very well done and very hot. I hope there's more.