rate_review Reviews

Wow! That was very different than expected! A torture fic and a love fic in one. I really liked the way they fell for each other and the way they accepted their feelings.

I think the first chapter was far too long. It also kind copies the show of what had happened in the battle of Kurama vs Karasu.

Wow...
thats an even more whack version of the Karasu/Kurama fight than I wrote... You could write the textbook on Karasu's sadism...

My only recommendation is to cut back on the big fancy words. It's irritating and it kills the mood when you find a word you don't know.

Great fic, though

lol, i didnt meant to sound so aggressive, lol, its just that i expected some lemony action :P, anywhoo the whole threesome idea is awsm XD
yay keep writing :)

Aw! That chapter was really sorta cute! I actually liked how you spent more time examining each of their reactions to being in love than the sex parts. Kurama really just made me laugh. He was acting so giddy about it all! That was too cute, even for the youko! And Hiei's confusion was right up there with Yusuke's inexperience for me. Great job! It seems George knew what he was doing making this multi-chaptered. ;)

Oh, btw, since I'm too lazy to go back to your LJ and comment, I'm looking forward to your original story. I read the preview drabble and am already interested. Hope it turns out okay!

*Grins and beckons before patting my lap* C'mere my pretty, I'll give you that spanking now ;)

Seriously, I love the way you brought out Hiei's reactions in this. The shower scene was awesome, perfect as it was. I wouldn't change a thing really. Yusuke's uncertainty and need for reassurance was dead on as well, it's good to see him so unsure of himself on occasion. Much love for this story, I do believe it's become one of my favorites. Keep up the great work :D

I know I'm bad, I didn't get to review the last chapter and here you are with the third one already!

Dude...first there was a mind-blowing lemon: OMG THE POSITION!, then you slap me in the face again with another one, except this time they're in the SHOWER!...you broke my brain...really...I'm surprised that I can type. The psycological aspects of Hiei and Yusuke's struggle with the developing relationship was done very well, your writing is gaining more depth, and I enjoyed the teasing through the second chapter (Yusuke and Hiei checking each other out was funny and hawt...I want a clear shower curtain with a nekkid Hiei behind it!).

The three of them sleeping together and snuggling against each other as they were forming the bond was so cute and un-fluffy, just the way I like it. It's so funny how you write this story that you think is all about Karasu/Kurama and you muse brings you right back to the OT3. But you OWN the OT3, so I guess I shouldn't be too suprised.

Now, I'm interested in the original story you're writing...

Yay! Aff is running much faster and smoother now. I hope it lasts. What a great ending for this story. I love a shy and confused Yusuke. It just makes him that much more sexy, I think. The lemon was hot and the second lemon was just right. It's a good thing listening to your muse, lol. I look forward to reading your original piece. It's sounds romantic. I'm a sucker for romance. But knowing you, you'll have all kinds of angst, twists and turns ^_^ I had to re-work the lemon in my YuYu chapter nine. I didn't like how it was turning out so I had to start over which put me behind again. But, I'm just about done and I love the changes I made. It's really naughty ^_^ LOL

Awesome as always. Great ending, I love them together. I look forward to your next story.

And what a way to end this story!!! OMG!! Not ONE lemon, but TWO.... and who said the second was sparse!?!? I loved seeing it from Hiei's POV; loved hearing the guys express their love for each other.... hell, I just plain LOVED this story!!