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person vincent
schedule June 11, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Oh my gosh! Finding YusukeXJin is impossible and you rocked at it. Everytime Jin spoke I heard his adorable accent in my head. It's great and I am only done with the first chapter. You rock!
person kitkit
schedule December 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
love it
schedule November 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I've been following this story for... a year and a half I think... yeah, that sounds about right. Anyway, I've always loved this story (and you're other one for that matter), and I love the way you ended it. I think if you are up to it, a sequal would be awesome, but that's a bit of a stretch, trust me, I know how big of a bite that is. Anyway just a couple of things I noticed, in both your stories actually, you had a couple typos, not anything bad, just a bit annoying when you have to go back and reread it. You might want to get a beta if you don't already and if you do, you might want to go over it again after getting it back. Let's see... I think that was all I wanted to say in the critique area, so I just wanted to thankyou for writing an awesome fic. You're fic got me into Mpregs, and it turns out for some odd reason I like them, so thanks. Can't wait to see what you come up with next (although if you can I hope you finish Vixen, I really really do.)
Sorry for any typos in this, you can imagine how heavily I rely on my beta.
Have a happy holiday! (and happy thanksgiving if you're in America.... God this review turned out MUCH longer then I thought it would be...sorry 'bout that.)
person 66Hiei08
schedule November 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Great story!! i read every chapter with eagerness!!
person kerbear
schedule November 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Just promise there'll be more about them .A sequel maybe? MMm,please.
Great story,I didn't want it to end
schedule November 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
*takes a deep breath* yaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay! *catches breath*
ok, luved the ending, it fits perfectly and awww they had a set of twins awesome. now since this beauty of a fic is complete, how bout u work on my fav missy -,- ^^ it is only fitting ^^ three thumbs up \m/^^\m/ ^^
person nette
schedule October 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
omg finally after ten thousands years ^^ and thanks for the shout ^^. awwwwwwwwww jin and yusuke are finally together, bout damn time too *nods* and yes i enjoyed every bit of it and sorry my review is so late, school and life is a bitch. but yes better be an epilogue or im gonna cry. i wanna see Oops when he older and running his fathers ragged lol. so EPILOGUE EPILOGUE, or at least a pt 2. cant leave it hanging luv XD
person mikomi
schedule September 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
such a great stroy! i followed it for a bit and was hooked! i loved the keiko bashing!! sometimes she deserves it!

great work or art!

laters! ~_^
person kitkit
schedule September 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
lovely chapter, no offense to any keiko lovers, but i hope she's not pregnant, even though that would make a good sequel. i also hope that yusuke can become pregnant, so that they can have more kids safely. beside it would be totally funny to see yusuke pregnant. i think in a odd way he would make a good mom, a little rash at times, but a good mom.
person kerbear
schedule September 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Though you need help with some of the spelling.Its a great story and I almost don't want it to end.
There's so much more you could delve into,I really hope there's a sequel to this story.