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May 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I hope you will forgive me if what I say seems rude.
Your chapters are stunted and jerky. You seem to have only the loosest concept of grammar, all of your characters are very ooc - I don't mind a divergence from canon, but I do try to keep it IC - and your format isn't just difficult to read, it is almost impossible.
I might have gone past Chapter 2 if it wasn't so much work to slog through for so little content.
Once again, I hope you can forgive my rudeness and that my critique will help you with your future writings.
Your chapters are stunted and jerky. You seem to have only the loosest concept of grammar, all of your characters are very ooc - I don't mind a divergence from canon, but I do try to keep it IC - and your format isn't just difficult to read, it is almost impossible.
I might have gone past Chapter 2 if it wasn't so much work to slog through for so little content.
Once again, I hope you can forgive my rudeness and that my critique will help you with your future writings.
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May 4, 2007 at 12:00 AM
me like i would love to see little drabbles of the kids growing up..they seem so cute
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December 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Loved the story, Kay-chan. I also read Sekia The Hanyou on mediaminer ^_^ They're both good. Post more stuff please. And e-mail me some good stories
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August 18, 2006 at 12:00 AM
a good story coming on here, i can not wait for more to be added.
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June 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
about time you updated thought this story was a goner. okay how about hari, kai, and i can't think of none for 'y'. so good luck wit naming them and can't to read more.
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June 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow im glad the kits are here and i say name one of the kits kouranue(sp)... you know after kurama old partner
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February 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
awwwwwwwwwww this is so cute i love it
oh my god please keep going i love
it. i hate mood swings to including
when your on your cycle god thats
a pain in the ass i swear! but still
keep going its so cute awwwwwww
i can't wait to see how the kits are
going to look.
oh my god please keep going i love
it. i hate mood swings to including
when your on your cycle god thats
a pain in the ass i swear! but still
keep going its so cute awwwwwww
i can't wait to see how the kits are
going to look.
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February 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
nice
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November 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Prostitute? PROSTITUTE?
Bwahahahahh!
Moron. Either you don't understand basic anatomy or threw a hooker into the mix. Just a note: girls don't have prostates, and the prostate isn't a magical lovebutton either.
Bwahahahahh!
Moron. Either you don't understand basic anatomy or threw a hooker into the mix. Just a note: girls don't have prostates, and the prostate isn't a magical lovebutton either.
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October 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
please update soon. please send me the next chapter when you update.