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Wow. That was just...hot. As I've said before, the voyeuristic Hiei is very amusing, but it's even better now that Kuwabara knows (and that he's kind of turned on by it). I sense that there are some surprises in store for Hiei (but he really does need to mind his own business).

The entire opening scene where Kurama has Kuwabara control his ki was very well-written, and wonderfully soaked in sensuailty. You characterize Kurama wonderfully, and I'm still mopping up my brain from the inages you painted in the following scene.

That was so fucking hot. What a great 69 description. Hiei is such a perv, lol. I loved that Kuwa knew Hiei was there and it turned him on. Good for Kuwa to get one up on the hot little firefly. So much goodness here. Damn, Kurama's hot as hell.

(Glares at the redheads) You ate the cookies I EARNED!!?

Please excuse me while I draw this curtain for a few iminutes.....
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(curtain draws back revealing two redheads in stocks and unable to ... touch a certain body part at's standing at attention.)

Perhaps that will teach you not to eat a woman's well-earned cookies!!


on to my review=
They seem to be in character to me. Even Kuwabara being devious fits.

You write very well. Your style is good, you don't make the errors that plague so many authors, and the characters are recognisable. Very impressive.

Besides that, the story has definately got my attention. I'll confess to being a perv, but I need smut with substance, preferably some psychological depth. You're doing great. I'll be looking forward to more.

...I hope this is encouraging you...

My, my Hiei sounding like he getting a little green with envy. So what going to happen on the next chapter? I hope a bit of HieixKazuma. I can't wait for the next update!

Arg! Hiei's a little perve! Perve! It's great to read from you now that I'm back from my vacation! *stuff Kuwa in her saddle bag*

I have to say that I'm not a fan of the Kurama/Kuwabara pairing, but your story is very well-written and the yaoi scenes are extremely hot - I'm really enjoying this. And the vouyeristic Hiei is highly amusing. That last scene where Hiei and Kurama were "having words" and Kurama flicked out his rose whip at Hiei - it was written so well, I could see every part of that perfectly.

Also, Kurama extending his hand through the waterfall at Kuwabara - beautiful. I'm loving this.

Sounds like Hiei is jealous.... of Kurama or Kuwabara I'm not sure.... yet! Although he does seen interested that Kuwabara was acting submissive.
That would explain why Kurma is defensive about Hiei spying on them .. or should I say spying on Kuwabara.

"Kuwabra looked The fox tried to pull his lover’s tempting lips close again, but the carrot-top resisted. The younger boy’s attention was focused elsewhere. He was looking in the direction of the trees, staring through them rather than at them. A curious expression had taken hold of his face. He abruptly looked away from the tree line and laughed. "

I suspect that Kuwabara noticed Hiei then, didn't he? Kuwabara already knows that Hiei's spying on him & Kurama.

Go Kuwa! Give Kurama some lovin, lol. Kurama's a great teacher. He could teach me a few things. ^_^ I'm thinking Hiei's getting a bit jealous and just may want to try out our carrot-topped fool. I wonder how Kurama would react to that. He's such a perv. He'd probably want a threesoe, lol. Looking forward to the next chapter.

*glomps* I love you! And I can't wait for the rest of this awesome story!