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for Beyond Understanding

by hColleen

person Suryallee
schedule September 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
No problem and,
Danke…dieses is sehr lange, ja? Und, danke fur mein Deutsche corectieren…es ist seit 6 jare seit Uni fur mich.
(Danke, (I think you meant with the folowing ) dauerte das zu lange/ Or ( oder)/ hat das jetzt zu lange gedauert? ( without the yes, because the question stands in German for its own. you dont have to question your question with a insertet yes to make the positive form out of it.)
The rest is nearly correkt! Es ist 6 jahre her seid der Uni für mich.
Wow for six years without any praktise you know quite much. It is hard to remember all when you have no praktise, we use to think we will ever remember what we once learned, wrong! The most we forget in a year without praktise, I see that by myself often.
I am glad you took my correktion of it not wrong. And besides that, Yes! It was to long, for me but dont give anything about my rampling because I should shuut up and write on my own ones!
Love it!
person Devious Lil Devil
schedule September 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hiei's little bout of jealousy in the beginning was cute. youe did real good with decribing the fight this chapter. i dint even remember the hellcats until you mentioned them. anyway, lovely work. always looking foward to more.
schedule September 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*chuckles* I can't write dialogue myself, seems to be my nemesis. Another good chapter, I can't wait for the next one to see even more of what is going on in Hiei's head. Update soon please.
person kit-kit
schedule September 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
nice i love the dialogue you made up
person kit-kit
schedule August 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow the chapter and the poem was good
person Suryallee
schedule August 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It´s still cooking, I like The new chapter, but... Its sooo short!
person Devious Lil Devil
schedule August 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
nice chapter. love the way you're sticking to the story while adding in hiei's thoughts on whats happening around him. yes, hiei, we want you to fall for yusuke. fall hard, i say! i love me a yusuke but i love my hiei just a bit (tch. a hella lot) more. ^__^ oh and very nice poem, btw. looking foward to your next update.
person Atsim Frotw
schedule August 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I liked it! We need more Yusuke/Hiei love! Here's a title : Hiei's Distraction : not very good, but I tried ^__^;. I love this story! Please keep going!
person vampslyr
schedule August 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh yeah, I like this this! I've got a really good feeling about it. Masterful interweaving of the cannon and your take on Hiei's thought process. How about "Behind Red Eyes" since this seems to be from Hiei's point of view. 'Course, that could just be this chapter.
schedule August 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WooHoo!!!!! Another Yusuke fic. I just love my Yusuke. I love how you're sticking with the cannon. That always makes a fic more fun to read. What a wonderful start. I can't wait to read more. Way to go H.