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by hColleen

person Eye of Ra
schedule September 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
well, hun.. you did first person *very* nicely. and i loved it. and if it wasnt like... 15 minutes to 2 am... and me already being sleep deprived.. ans not being able to see what im typing.. just like i told you before... lol.. if you even see that first... this is all you get for a review. LOVED it! ^^ and after i look at all the stuff you've done or updated recently.. i am SO headed off to bed. O o;; i need to sleep sometime.

and yes i realize these are some of the longest reviews i've written for you. hahha... oh well.. but yeh. night!


Ra
person none
schedule August 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
that was very well written story. it was brave writing a four-some, but you pulled it off nicely. i can't wait to read more of your stories. keep writing and good luck. ^_^
person Tendrilrake
schedule August 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, i'll never cease to be amazed at your ability to make even a simple touch the most sensual thing- love the way you worte the thing as a memory, too. Two thumbs up, ten stars and, erm... a Kurama plushi! *Holds up Kurama plushi* kudo's for all- and this one needs to be continued... again! :P
Never thought of Koenma as a bondage freak- but Yusuke as a cum adict is *very* sexy- gah I love your stories!!!
-Tendi
person Kogas Hentai Luver
schedule August 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Damn that was naughty! Kurama is such a perv, hehehe. But then again, they all are! I love that Yusuke loves giving head and pillow talk and that Koenma needs to be tired up. I also liked that Yusuke and Hiei had caught onto Yoko's game earlier and had themselves a little appitizer first, lol. Totally creative and fun. You've done it again, H. Love ya all day long ^_~ I'll be sending you more Sandy Youko chapters tonight, K. CYA
person Ren-chan
schedule August 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Um...This is the first time I've ever reviewed a story and this is the first time I've really read a really good yoai fic. I usually don't go for anything more extreme than shonen ai, but I have to say that this was a nice change of pace! (blush) I think that your story's presentation was great. Your grammar was good, your spelling was good you even managed to keep the characters in character! I love that! It proves that you're a really great author. I actually read both of your yuyu Hakusho fics and I liked them. You made Kurama seem so naughty! Please write more.
person shiorifoxiesmom
schedule August 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
WOW!!! That was so hot. More please.
person Shuichi Shindou
schedule August 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Instant orgasm! though, I can tell you it would be nice if you keep it all in one person... like the flash back was good but the last you switch a bit through present and past.
schedule August 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow..that was just..wow.

Hold on, my brain spilled out all over the keyboard. OK, that's better. So, how many different ways can I say "That was HOT!". Just when I thought it couldn't go further, it kept going. So well written too, and I find it hard to write lemons.

I'm also loving the Hiei/Yusuke chocolate revenge. It was nice to see Youko lose control. And I like how you have Hiei as the seme and uke, I always thought of him as both.

Again...wow...you just made my week!
schedule August 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
All I can say is Fuck! That was hot, you did an excellent job.*pants* I'm sure there's not a dry seat in the house here. Wonderful, can't wait to read more of your work.
person kit-kit
schedule August 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow that was hot