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by Suryallee7104

person Suryallee
schedule July 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
If he keeps up that pase...°__°! Joke, hey she is only thouteen by now!!!
schedule July 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
It's getting better. Still, there are some prepositions where it's better to leave them out. *licking the Hiei/Keiko lemon*
schedule July 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yummy. I got really hot reading that! Lol. Hiei's a seductive prick! I have to agree witht he above reviewer! Keiko really is a lucky girl!
person Altar of Wishes
schedule July 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Question, does you daughter really think that I am the "bad" one? *falls back laughing*
person Suryallee
schedule July 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
NOO!
She put all your names together and made out of them this stupid Altra chant!
She heard me complain about the ideots who let you feel bad some time ago and asked me of who I seak of in her way of asking, I told her then that I have someone with the name Altar who I talk with mostly. and some of the events that made me that angry.
Somehow she must have thought I only mean you when I told her happy birthday form you all and so she began to chant her, well, little chant the entire day!
Dont ask me how she came up with that!
schedule July 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Good chapter, Keiko is extremely lucky. Can't wait to see what happens next. Update soon please.
person The Green Knight
schedule July 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh yeah... Tell your daughter that the wacky Green Knight said to have a Happy Birthday!
person Altar of Wishes
schedule July 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey Sury-san! Happy birthday to your daughter!
person Anon
schedule July 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
awww thats sooo sweet wat keiko did for hiei and now hiei's has finally admitted to himself that he likes keiko awwwww thats soooooo swwwweeeeet
love your story keep up the great work^^
person InTheShadows
schedule July 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow! That was awesome this is for the 2 chapters after the author's note. Lol The story is going great. I don't mind the pairings and I have nothing against it. Update soon!!! ^^

-InTheShadows.