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September 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really like the story it has a good plot, but you have major proof reading issues that a computer can't just fix. An example is the fact that you constantly use the word leaved and it should be 'left'. Sometimes the sentences are also phrased oddly like you need to switch the wording around. I hope you don't mind me telling you this and I hope you update your story soon.
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September 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I know that I have problems, thats why I am working on it and thus that I will change them when I get them back from my beta.
( to the reader above)
( to the reader above)
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September 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
update NOW NOWW NOW NOW NOW NOW PLZ UPDTAE THE CHAPTER OSOON ITS SO SOS OS OS SO SSOS OS SOS OS Sos so SO SO SO GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOODDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD PLZ PLZPLZPZLPZLZLPZLPZLPZLPZLPZLPLZPLZPZLPZLPZPZLPZLPZPPZZPLPZPLZPLZPLZPLZPLPPLZplzPLZPlplZPlzplZPlzplZPLzplZPLzplplzPLplZPLzplZPLplzPLZZPLplzPLzpLPLZPLZPLZPLZplzPLZplplzPLPLZplpzlPLZplzPLZplzpPZLplzPLZplplPLZPLPLZPLPlplPZLplzPLZplZPLPLzplZ im begging u can u put a lemon in the next chapter plz I CANT WAIT I THINK IM GONG TO DIE FOR WAITINg
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August 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
you....you are mean....you are not suposed to leave it off like that....thats just torture right there *sigh* please keep the chapters cummin!
P.S. i like you other stories to!
P.S. i like you other stories to!
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August 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Awesome, now he has her where he wants her now all it's going to take is that little push to convince her. I look forward to reading the next chapter, update soon please.
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August 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
awww i cant wait till u update again but family comes first i understand so as a faithful reader ill be waiting paitently for ur update^^
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August 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Her classmates where too (1) loudly (2) in the bus and she felt nauseated from the events before, all the time!
Alrighty... (1) the ending can be dropped-- no "ly" (2) it should be "on" that's one specific example I can point out to you. I hope it was helpful to you because I am no English major. *is scared of school anyway*
So Mukuro's starting to notice that Hiei's finally been laid huh? I hope that she doesn't meddle too much!
Alrighty... (1) the ending can be dropped-- no "ly" (2) it should be "on" that's one specific example I can point out to you. I hope it was helpful to you because I am no English major. *is scared of school anyway*
So Mukuro's starting to notice that Hiei's finally been laid huh? I hope that she doesn't meddle too much!
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August 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey you're not a slave you know! XD Take you time 'cause it's your time and no one elses! Emergencies are important!
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August 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Poor Keiko, hopefully she finds the love she need with Hiei. Update soon please.
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July 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Here's what I think: I think that Hiei's going to end up with a Hiei jr! Haha! I am having so much fun reading stories from you!