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um yeah, this really doesnt make much sense. Not trying to be funny or anything but is english your second language by any chance?

Yeah... Sury's not a native speaker/writer of English.

I like it. I look forward to reading more. Usually your stories feature Keiko heavily. While I don't hate her, she is not one of my favorites, so I only read them from time to time (No offense. It has nothing to do with your writing, I'm just not that big a Keiko fan.) When I saw you wrote a Hiei/Yusuke, I had to read it, and I am glad I did.

You have great ideas. Even your Keiko stories manage to draw me in. Never let anyone make you feel bad for your writing. You are right; you try. That is much more than some others do. I studied Spanish for a long time, and I had to write essays and reports in that language. Even with all the classes, it's difficult to truly master another language. If I recall, you said you were self taught. I think you're doing just fine. If someone can't understand that, then you really have to think: maybe it isn't your writing that's the problem. Maybe their reading skills are. Keep writing; you're doing fine.

I think you've done a fine job considering English is not your native language. Try not to let it get you down, betas are great and all but like you stated they do have things of their own to do as well. I look forward to the next chapter. Update soon please.

Damn, when I seen a Chapter 2 I was hoping for some fun... but, curse those anal people! Then again, look at it this way, those that make a big fuss about it probably make nearly the same mistakes. I know I do on most occasions. Love it so far and can't wait to see what's going to happen next.

Hmm... shamefully the only thing shorter than Hiei is this chapter! I will dutifully wait for more!

nice chapter but alot of your sentences didn't make sense i think you should read over it and try to re-edit the chapter.