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Oh, god, it's so true! I wasn't sure I was going to finsih the chapter because I was laughing so hard. Love it, and I'm having just as much fun reading as you are writing.

all i have to say is this:

LMFAO!!!!!!!!!!

Oh, the pain.... Ugh... Mary Sues...
This his hilarious, but when she interupted the beautifully hot, drool-worthy sex that you write oh so well, even I almost felt queasy. Impressive.

XD Hilarious! Particularly that part with Kuwabara. And go Botan, go! And . . . poor Kenshin (that is Kenshin at the end, right?).

Excellent satire of the epitome Mary Sue. Excerpts of your story ought to be posted in reviews to true Mary Sue stories in the future. Even if *they* don't get it, it might give tormented readers who experienced the displeasure of stumbling upon it something positive to walk away with.

This is just...is just...I laughed so hard while I was reading the last 2 chapters that EMOD told me to shut the hell up. You even fucked up the chapter names! HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! This is totally a story for the record books, I mean, you hit every single Mary Sue-ism and did it so it comes around the corner and slaps you in the head.

Oh, and yeah, the lemon was hot...very hot, I forgot about the big MS and then I almost cried.

This fic had me both dying from laughter and shivering from fear at the same time. She's scary, that Mary Sue Wannabe. I think I agree with you; if she's not evil, then I don't know what is. Really, this was too hilarious! And when she caught Kurama and Hiei...I pretty much died! It was so sad, yet so very funny. I wasn't going to read this at first because of the Mary Sue thing, but gave in when I saw it was you. I'm glad I did. That was certainly worth a laugh...or fifty.

One small error in the last chapter. You forgot 'kill', I'm guessing in this sentence: He could Kuwabara later.

Oh, and one more thing: wonderful use of the word kawaii! Used it true Mary Sue form!

Whee....Good bye and Good riddance! lol I'm teasing...oh, poor poor Hiei and Kuarama! lol At least now things are back to the status quo :D Poor Kenshin...lol

A sequal...oh, dear...the good OC would be as embarassed as the CC, wouldn't she? Oh poor girl.

Anyways...a good laugh...and yay for Kurama showing poor Hiei how easy it is for simple things to distract the body ;) lol

I feel so bad for hiei and kurama.... I may read fanfiction but I hate mary sue's!!!! damn she pisses me off.....yea..

you are a very good writer although I hate mary sue's

This is truely hilarious. I've never bothered to read anything like this before and I'm glad I tried it out with this one since I love your other stories. Good job at whatever this would be classified as. XD I can hardly wait for more.

I think you were right about the lemon scene. It was pretty sensual.

I feel so sorry for Kurama and Hiei though. Interupted and then trapped by a Sue. That's got to be like a fate worse than death. And she made the mistake of "ravage" versus "ravish" that is in every bad smut fic.
I feel sorry for Kuwabara too, bashed and then trapped in a keikai.