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This chapter gave me mixed feelings.
First, I really liked the way you portrayed Hiei as he was watching Kurama and Shiori hug.
It was pretty painful to read; I really love our little fire demon. So sad!!!

But, I also felt a little disappointed with the way Shiori seems to be getting a bigger part than I wished.
Many Kurama/Hiei fanfic authors tend to use Shiori as a big conflict factor, but I like it better when the fic focuses on Kurama and Hiei themselves, not their surrounding family (ex. Shiori, Yukina) In my opinion, Kurama and Hiei would have a very private relationship, very restrained on the outside, but much more intense when they do interact.

Don't worry, your fic is still great!
Just my two cents, tastes differ.
Your story is awesome so far, I'll be waiting for more!

I think you did a very good job on this chapter. There was just one thing from canon that you got wrong. Kurama has cried once. Only once, but still once. He cried in the manga when he rejoined his mother after finding out that she was going to live. But I think you're story is great so far. ^^

I loved your latest chapter and look forward to the next. I love your grouchy Hiei and patient Kurama and their evolving relationship.

First of all, I wanted you to know that your summary was just this side of off-putting. It did draw me in, just to see if you lived up to it's claim. Which you did, have no fear of that, but a good summary it what draws a reader to your story, so be careful about sounding too arrogant. As for the story itself, I think you've been doing an excelent job staying *truly* in character. With most characters there tends to develop a 'fannon' characterization, which is fine, but you have done an exemplary job at staying true to the cannon characterization. My one complaint is on your paceing. You seem to feel that you're going too slow, but I feel that this might be causeing you to rush things. Hiei's such a reserved character, and very much into self denial (as in the situation with his sister). I think you might be pushing him to realizations too quickly. I know we readers are often impatient and clamor for more action, but let the story develop at it's own pace. Don't give in to readers or your own impatience. I will be eagerly looking forward to seeing more of this. Keep up the good work.

Woot for Texas, and woot for libraries!! That's where I live and where I work... ;b Nicely written chap, and anticipation is all well and good but you better make sure you can live up to it. =]

WOW, the image of Hiei reading smut novels fills my mind and won't leave rofl. That was a good chapter. I'm so glad you didn't have Hiei jumping up and down with proclimations of love right of when he realizes he does feel something for Kurama. Caring is a good start. Can't wait to read more.

Yayness! Another update from my favoutrite IC author!.. Ok, well, you're the only other IC author I know really, besides myself...but hey! You're still my favourite! Your latest chapters kick ass and I can't wait to see more from you soon. Keep the good stuff coming!

Wonderful fic. The characters are so very true to themselves, and the story just sucks you in. I'm looking forward to more updates.

Altar: *smacks Hiei with a paper fan, Sanzo-style* Get it through your thick head chibi baka! Not everyone is here to please you! *more Sanzo-styled attacks* Anti-social prick!

Hiei: *pulls out his sword* Watch it han'kuro onna!

Altar: *eyes glowing* Make me...

Kurama: ... *stares blankly for a moment* Please continue with the story.

Bravo! Bravo! A New Chapter! (And I have checked to see whether there is any new update several times a day since the 5th!)
Your writing style is really pleasant, and the unfolding of the story is just deliciously paced, so don't let anyone hurry you into anything other
than what you've planned in your mind. Please update soon. ;-)