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Oh dear god WHY?

oooh... i like how the story is going since ch. 2 when i last read. i think their relationship, so far, is developing in a believable way while allowing for some character development that goes beyond what we saw in the anime. (after all, if hiei got pissed and ran off every time kurama tried to do anything, nothing would ever happen.) your interpretation of who hiei and kurama really are is so unique and yet fits so well with the (relatively little) insight we'd gotten into their characters in the series. my only suggestion at this point would be for you to add a little more description in what is happening. although you've got the dialogue (both internal and external) and the chatacerization down really well, when you describe the actual situations it seems to be missing something. it sort of comes out like 'kurama did this, hiei did that, kurama thought this,' etc. maybe you could try adding a bit more detail to really show us what the characters see, taste, feel-if its pleasure, confusion, warmth, pain, whatever. i can see how you would want to avoid going overboard with flowery graphic description, particularly with your writing style, but i think it could use a little more.... something. anyway, that's my only criticism, and i wouldn't have bothered if i didn't totally love this story. so, please continue, and if you think i don't know what i'm talking about, feel free to ignore me but keep writing :) can't wait to read more!

very good chapter. things are going good. is hiei going to go back to yusuke? and ask him about what happend now?

Awwwww! I have to say... I LOVE IT! I am just a sucker for Kurama x Hiei stories, but really, you are doing a wonderful job! Keep up the good work!

Keep going! Please write more! I wanna know what happens! E-mail me whenever you update.

I thought that I would drop a word of encouragement. I really like where this is going and you are doing well with keeping them in character. Good luck!

Keeping characters IC is one thing but I think if your going to write a story you're going to have to bend the characterizations a little. I mean it would be boring if the characters remained static and din't grow throughout the plot. As long as you put in a little explanation as to why a character behaves the way the do it's fine. So I think you doing a wonderful job, especially at keeping such a high quality of work.

Short and sweet :D
I'm hoping this will be more of a Kurama x Hiei fic than a Hiei x Kurama one.
(Though I like how things are going regardless of erm, who's on top)
One thing for sure, your Kurama is definitely refreshing!
I'm so glad he's not crying~ (sobs)

very good. umm.. im brain dead...did i review this chapter of the 2nd one before? either way i love this fic!

It's simply amazing that you manage to write a story with content like this, yet still keep the characters perfectly in character. Though, Hiei being confused and nervous and showing it is rather strange, but I suppose we all do it. Well done and I hope you continue soon.