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for Breaking In The Team

by ss_dragon_lady

person Koorime1905
schedule May 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
well,well,you are such a hentai,why can you do it,well,i'm very glad*smile evelly*but i don't think Yusuke will ever forgive u if you make our two demons take her.Oh well,Hiei is really a Forbidden Child right noa,how can she do it with his sister,i'm very curious now.Keep going.
person bonny
schedule May 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
THAT WAS SO COOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I can't wait to read the rest of it. HURRY UP AND WRITE IT PLEASE !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
person Eye of Ra
schedule May 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
heh. that was *very* interesting! i am so looking forward to see what you do with this. ^^
person shiorifoxiesmom
schedule May 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow. This gets more fun with every chapter. I can't wait to see the different reations. The girls should be very interesting. Update soon.
person kit-kit
schedule May 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
great chapter i hope they take another lover maybe yusuke. he might be a virgin but we all know thats he's a hetai and mostly likely he can give kurama and hiei a run for there money in sex and such.
person Katzz
schedule May 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hehe I couldn't stop thinking of this story at work XD

I realized something, both Keiko and Botan are in, what about Shizuru? Since the Dark Tournament, she's as involved as Keiko. Are you following the show or the manga? In the anime, Atsuko doesn't know jack about the Spirit World but in the manga she goes to the Dark Tournament with Botan, Kieko & Shixuru. She actually seemed to enjoy watching the fights.

You're adding incest, oaky I have to say this, Yukina/Hiei is the most common incest pairing there is. If you like a challenge then a adding Shizuru to the mix would be bold. There is a plausible scenario for either Yusuke or Kuwabra to end up in an incestous encounter. Both Shizuru and Atsuko drink and so do Kazuma and Yusuke. One possible scene is that they get drunk and end up together with family.

That scenario isn't original, I got it froma current manga I'm reading =Battle Vixens. The main girl, Hakufu has a cousin , Shyuyu has found himsefl waking up after a night of drinking to find his aunt, Hakufu's mom, Goei, is nekad and sleeping next to him. Neihter Goei or Shyuyu can remember if they had slept together but twice they wake up naked together after a night of party.

That scenario is ripe of potentials...... ack it's given me ideas
person C
schedule May 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like this story, but then, I have yet to read one of your stories that I don't like. I can't wait for the next installment!
person Katzztar
schedule May 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hehe I agree that Kuwabara would be able to handle the rough stuff. Hiei mentioned about Kuwa's regenative aiblity aka healing powers. That would not only help him with the tough stuff but give him endurnce as well. Hehe I would love to see Hiei & Kurama's looks when they realize that Kuwabra is not innocent in the sex dept.

I mentioned it before but I'll say it again. Kuwabara's the leaders of astreet gang, I highly doubt he's virginal. Helk, not only is sex a fact amoung gangs, it's a tool. Sex is used for initiations and for making/sealing deals with others. Unlike the others, Kuwabra most likely see their actions as that they are breaking in the team. XD
person kogas hentai luver
schedule May 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Damn that was hot. I can't wait to see who's next on the list. I would love for Yusuke to be next.
person citizencobalt
schedule May 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yay! Yuusuke next! Can Hiei be bottom? Could Yuusuke be aggressive? The prey needs to turn the tables at least once. Great fic, keep going, please.