rate_review Reviews

I absolutely love your story! I'll admit that Hiei seemed a bit OCC but otherwise it was perfect! This is like the uncut part of Yu Yu Hakusho that i've always wanted to see! And it's great how you expressed Kuwabara and Yukina's innocent relationship well.... dirty. XD I love your story and can't stop reading it! For once, i've read a good smutty fic that follows the plot line and even the character's seem to stick to the actual anime! Btw, i've seen parts of Bible Black so i can say that it's not ALL bad.. but the rest... yes.. makes me want to never see the male organ again. >_< I hope you write some more kuwa/yuki in the future, or just any story period! ^^

Just the right mix of surealism and hentai to make this work. It's a great success. I sincerly hope you do write a sequal to this... PLEEEEASE?

Yeah... that was actually more limesh than lemonish though... good job!

I'm still confused as to whether Kuwabara and Yukina had sex or not, but oh well. I guess the suggestion is enough for me. A lot of people say she's too innocent when it comes to Kuwa¤Yukina but when it's somebody else and Yukina.... at least that's what Altar and I concluded.

Hehe I always wndered what Kuwa's view of the events were. Or perhaps the scene they hinted at when she said his fingers were more suited for the task and he said that he tought she didn't remember.... I would like to see that event.

That was more confusing than erotic, but kudos for the humor! I like funny stuff without bashing characters!

That was great. I like Hiei testing Kuwabara for Yukina in a non-raping-him-way. The last story I read with this general idea, Kuwabara was raped by Hiei as a so-called test of strength. I still have vivid nightmares of it.

Well, this was a change of pace..... interseting that both elder siblings teamed up to get Kazuma & Yukina together....in a reather unconvential and dirty sort of way.... well at least they make sure that the prosective one can please (therefor stay/keep) their younger siblings.

Is this really a one shot or will you add a chapter wiht Kazuma & Yukina really together???

My responses:

1. Thank you very much. :)

2. I have to hone my skills considerably before I can write any Kuwakina scene. I have written lemons before, but I want them to be better than my prior work.

3. That one was weird...but nothing compares to the one where Kuwabara, Hiei, & Yusuke gang on Kurama. Granted, they were under the influence of a poison in that piece, but still....

4. I know one prevailing quibble I've seen in reviews of all my fics is that my writing's a bit confusing. Could you show me where? (Usually it ends up being character dialogue.)

I hope to write again here at AFF. Thanks.

hm....not too shabby... not shabby at all... actually.... this is pretty good! haha

~snowdrops