rate_review Reviews

Wow... awesome work with this. The humor was there, though I think that some of the humor in this tended to make characters such as Hiei a bit OOC. There were so grammar problems too, but overall, I thought this was great. Yusuke/Keiko FOREVER BABY!! Update soon, k? I'd really like to see more of this.

I really like this story. There are not enough Yusuke/Keiko romances on this site. Most of the stories of Yaoi or pair Keiko up with Kurama. That is ok sometimes but it has been over done. Kurama needs to find his own girl and stay from Yusuke's before it causes a problem. Keep up the good work and I can't wait to see the next chapter.

GREAT fic plese update.son.

I do not think you need to remove the sentence as another reviewer requested. Is's common knowledge that Yusuke lost the tournament and common sense.
IF he won, he therefor would be ruler of the Makai and wouldn't be able to return to Ningenkai for Keiko? HELLO!Most YYH fan sites site that he DOES return and that Enki rules the united Makai. how many naive people believe that a teenager can defeat all those more experienced demons? Some, hell yes, but be the top one? No way he's too young and less experience than the majority.

And this is not the only story that fives spoilers. Fandom is filled with them.
Perhaps a spoiler warning would have helped but I do not think you shold remove the sentence. It helps the story flow. If yous wish to appolgize for not giving a spoiler warning, it's your choice. But I do not think that one is due because of the writing. In my veiw, that one little line helps show how Yusuke thinks and why he's not staying in Makai.

Thank you for putting up the spoiler warning. I want to apologize to you as well for what came off as a scolding. That was not my intention. I merely wanted to express my disappointment at now knowing the outcome of the Makai Tourn and to remind you to add a spoiler. When I re-read my remarks this morning I felt aweful. I wrote that late last night when I was tired and didn't choose my words carefully. I should have prefaced my remarks by saying: "I'm sure this was an oversight, but could you please put up a spoiler notice for those who haven't seen the serie's end." and left it at that. But as a mom of a 14 year old daughter, I guess scolding just comes out as a reflex, LOL. I think you handled my comments in a very mature and professional manner. You also added two spoiler warnings immediately. You rock!!! So once again I hope YOU accepte MY apology. ^_^

I printed chapter one last night and read it this morning. I was very impressed with the detail and the emotional turmoil that Yusuke is going through. I feel so sorry for him. Things just never seem to go his way, ya know. I love the suspense you've created and I loved Keiko's reaction to Yusuke's message. That's just so her. From what I've read so far, I can tell that you are a very talented and creative writer and I look forward to reading future chapters.

This story is both intersting and promising. I like the fact that your tackling the demonblod vs human blood.
I loved the fact that Kuwabara has some pull in Reikai XD he's my favorite!

You've dealth with their emotions well and pretty much in character.