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WOW! That was briliant! It was one of the best stories I have ever read in my entire life! The mating scene was beautiful (or as beautiful as two demons biting eachother's necks can get.) Everything was so great! I can't wait for Akambo! Did you say demonic scientist? I always wanted to write something about an evil scientific lab (if I can ever get enough courage to write something [my grammer sucks. -_-])

My idea was to have ::pause:: Have you read book 7 of the manga. If you haven't, it gives tells the story of Hiei and Kurama's first meeting. Long-story short, Kurama and Hiei are both trying to kill this evil demon named Yatsude for their own personal reasons. They team up, they kill him, they become good friends. The real story is a lot better than this crapy explaination.::unpause:: this evil lab capture Hiei (before he meets Kurama or Yusuke), but he escapes. Then the whole Kurama meets Hiei story I just told you. But then, Yatsude was really a minion( can't think of a better word) of the lab, who was captured and is being controled, sent out to capture Hiei. When Hiei and Kurama killed Yatsude, little tracking devices were planted in their skin (I'm still trying to think up this story, so I'm sorry if that seems kind of lame) So the lab has been tracking them from that point to the end of the series. The lab has sent out spies to gather information on them by the places they have been. The lab(It) knows of their weaknesses. It knows about Yusuke and his weakness, but it does not know of the Spirit World or the Demon World, only the stuff happening in Human World. This is a demon-hunting lab that has been around for decades, but Spirit World never did anything about it because they hate demons. Now humans have been going missing as well, the spirit detectives are on the case. Then Keiko, Yukina and Shiori are captured. Then, the lab turns Keiko and Shiori into..demons!

This is just how far I've gotten with it. It sucks. I'm not even sure this story will ever see the light of day. The one thing I'm really set on is Keiko becomeing demons. It's just so sad that Keiko will die long before Yusuke. She will age and die, and Yusuke will be all alone. And can a human bear a demon child and live? When Raizen and the human woman made a child, the woman died during childbirth. I thought that making Keiko a demon would make life easier for them. And with Shiori, well I thought it would add drama to the story. How would all this make her feel? She's just a normal human, with a normal human family, then one day she is captured and maded into a demon. A monster. How would her family react? What would her new husband and son think of her? What would her own son think of her if he saw her like this? I'm getting all emotional just thinking about it. It would make a good mother/son story. But what about Hiei?! He's the one who started all this! Well, sort of. That is my madger plot hole. I get so wrapped up with Keiko and Yusuke and Shiori and Kurama that I forgot Hiei! I don't even think I can fit a Hiei/Kurama pairing in there. I can't write, and this story may never see the light of day(T_T).
I hope you don't mind me putting this here. Please take it off if you don't want it here. If you read this, please tell me what you think of it. I will comment about it on your LJ either today or tomarrow. Please tell me what you think of it. But if you don't want me to talk about this, then know that this story may never be actually completed or written. You can use any of the ideas I a have here. I would be honored if you took them. And I would LOVE to see a Keiko or Shiori demon in one of your stories. I have never seen the ideas used before and it would be nice to see them. I will comment later.
Sincerely Mea
PS- A fox demon is the only demon I would like Shiori to be. I can't see her as anything else, and it go great with Kurama revieling his true self to her.

great, awesome, really freaking good. it gives me a stated feeling that it ended like that it was great way to end. I can't get rid of the smile thats on my face, which happens rarely. thank you really thank you it was good

Oh wow,the last chapter.As happy as I am to see the last chapter its as sad as I am to see it end.I didn't remember mention of them being bonded in "Bugs" but was happy to see it here and thought it was a great way to end this installment,happy to see they included Kurama's mom in knowing about it to.But how could you let her walk in on them on their honeymoon(of sorts) hehehe.You'd thought she would've learned from it for bugs(oh well)its a mom thing I guess.You did'nt mention any of Kurama's family for the next story hope it was an oversite.In between the insane doc are they going to the stepfathers family reunion(that could be another stresser for his mom)and a way to let her son and hubby know where she stands again.Anyway,Really well done and look forward to the next installment.And geaphic sex wasn't needed for the bonding and end warmth (least I don't think so) Well done take a bow,if I was there I'd give you a pat on the back :)

Well alright! A really great healing chapter,take a bow you've earned it.It was nice to see Hiei's power help Kurama even if he didn't know it would.And there is always at least one person that can pull someone out of a hospital funk(I and my cat were proud to be that person for someone close to me) it was a nice part and to have his mom see it was even better.You write very well and most(if not all) left me on the edge of my seat this was no exception,well done and I can't wait for the next chapter and look forward to the coming continueation. :)

Yay! Things are getting better :D I'm soooo happy...the next chapter...it has that scene you hinted at in Bugs, ne? Oh, I'm excited about that! I'm so glad the doctor's were fine with Hiei being around...it would have been horrid had they not. Your baby's almost done...what a wonderfully sady, sadly wonderful time...I have mixed feelings...I'm excited to see things coming together....and I'm sad to see them end. Please keep writing, you're wonderful at it :D

Awww. The thing with all of your fics is that I always get all built up and then I get this happy feeling inside of me when things work out. LOLs. I don't know it's so weird. EEEEEEE! YAY. ^^;;

WOW awesome chapter really made my day.
"I had to sever a few arms to get this one, but I think the blood all wiped off.” that was a cool line that how i feel when i go buy new books. truly effing wonderful. Just love the lines you give Hiei.
i'll be waiting for the next chapter.

Hope you got my Mail review.
I love this chapter!

Loved last chapter, it was kind of sad and sweet at the same time. I can't believe next will be the last chapter!I can't wait for it, but, at the same time, i don't want this story to end!!Please, tell me you'll be writing more stories about hiei and kurama, even if you'll make kurama suffer, as long as they end up together!!^_^

That whole chapter hit so close to home for me, it practically has my address.

Loving the marionette metaphor when Kurama was told about his level of clearance in Spirit World. I also like the dirty citrus scene (I'll tell you why I'm snickering about that later.) So much stood out for me: Shioru talking about the rings, Kurama's twisted stomach, Hiei rubbing heated circles on his back, but my favourite is Hiei burning the nurse. I wish I could've done that during some of my hospital stays!

You carried alot more emotion in this chapter, it made me feel warm.

Gods, that chapter was wondefully long, you totally made my night. Keep that writing bug in a cage and feed it well!