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Review for chapter 19:

I told you I was so far behind in reading your story that it wasn't even funny. Being THIS far behind is pathetic! I'm sorry! I've been rather self-absorbed lately story-wise, updating my own but not reading others. I've really missed reading this, but now I've found time to make up for it! Yay!

Anyways, that stuff at the end, all that Intaro was saying, was... amazing. Extremely warped and creepy, yes, but still poetic, in its own dark way. I really think you did a good job on his character, very Karasu-ish, as I'm sure you intended him to be ^__^ I look forward to seeing what happens next- and I think I'll go find out now XD

Oh damn it, I posted a similar review twice for 19. Damn it, I'm stupid (the computer screwed up and I thought the first review was deleted before I could post it -__-) And now I'm reviewing a third time over nothing. Sorry, just wanted to clarify that I'm not some moron who posts two very much alike reviews simultaneously for the same chapter ^__^ I'll be getting back to reading now.

And finally, the end of your wonderful story.
I really look foreward to read more from you. I loved this story really much!

Amazing as always. I will definitely read any other installments you decide to write for this saga. As far as chapter 36 goes: 1)The spelling, grammar, and tense were off more than is your usual, but nothing incredibly distracting. 2)The little details that you include such as how the doctor was called away for an emergency on the day of Kurama's release really make this story shine. It only added a couple sentences to the length and truly had no actual consequence, but it made the whole situation seem so much more realistic. 3)I really liked how Hiei responded to "Mr. and MRS. Shrimp" with a double mister and Minaminno. Keiko's added paragraph really made the whole moment that much more memorable. It was very fitting all the way around. 4)You really put a lot more thought into their marriage token than most people do in their stories. Your use of the hiruseki stone was also very creative. This is the first instance I've come across where the stone has been altered from its original form. 5)I thought it was funny that you mentioned all the different mating rituals that can be come upon in fanfiction. 6)The instinct necessary for the ceremony was mentioned before it happened, but one still doesn't know its happening until it has already begun. The subtlety of that part was very well done. 6)I really appreciated how, yes, the marks did dissapear after the ceremony, but they could still be felt as was demonstrated when Shiori touched Kurama's neck. That was really something special. 7)I'm in utter awe of this saga.

That was such a great story. I love it and can't wait for more! You did such a great job capturing Hiei and Kurama, how they would both change and grow within a relationship with each other. Just to let you know, you are my insperation. It was your story, this story, that got me to writing Hiei and Kurama stories. It gave me the nerve to say, hey I can write boyxboy love if I wanted, I had always read it. Thanks to you my stories and arc came to be. I am very grateful to you for that. You will always have a reader in me, if you keep writing and I hope you do. I would love to see that reunion story if it comes to light. Anyway, I just got to say again I loved this story and keep up the good work!

I am so happy for you - you must feel a great sense of accomplishment - now you have 2 ji-huge stories finished - that is a rare thing among ff authors. *Gasp* a finished story! Who would've thought?

But - anyway - you finished this in such a warm, lovely way. I walked away from this chapter feeling a bit melancholy but very very warm. (Melancholy because it's over!). I loved the rings, the stones in the rings and what those stones symbolized. I was surprised at first that Hiei gave his ring to Kurama in front of everyone, but he's going to do what he wants when he wants to and doesn't care what anyone thinks. Hatanaka needs a punch in the head though (I know it all gets straightened out - but he still ticks me off!).

The demon mating ritual was amazing - it wasn't the same thing that I've seen dozens of times before - but it was an actual ritual - and I like how it started slow and the energies built up. I loved how they marked each other, but not in the typical way - and that the marks faded by morning.

The end - from Shiori's pov, thinking back to the first chapter and about how Shuuichi has grown up, made everything come wonderfully full circle. I now feel all gushy (but that's good). Congratulations! Now I have to drvie down and celebrate with you!

Nice chapter. I feel like anything I would say to compliment your writing has already been said in previous reviews. One criticism, however, is that your tenses were often inconsistent in chapter 35.

Okay...here's an acomplishment...I actually read the whole chapter without getting up...I normally get up at least once every 5 minutes...and it took more than 5 minutes to read...and I actually usually have at least three things I'm doing at once...you got my full and mostly undivided attention (can't do much about the people around me asking me things....) But, I loved it!!!! I'm sad the story is over, but it was wonderful!!! Absolutely positively magnificently wonderful! :D Congratulations on your akanbou ;)

I can´t believe it's over!!T.T (happy tears) It was such a great chapter, loved it! It was so sweet!!Had the perfect flufness, so they were still hiei and kurama. And the mating ritual...i have to say it was the best one i've ever read, with no mating marks left behind... loved those details.
I can´t wait for "Just Bonded", specially cause they really know nothing about bounding ritual, so they'll have to figurate out on the way. ^.^ Although i do believe they can speak to each other mentally, even if other demons can't, afterall, jagan loves kurama as well.
And Akambo...can't wait for first chapter!!Even if you're gonna put some fox torture on it (you love it!¬¬)

One thing I must say about your last chapter is that I like how you dealt with the bonding. It's always same old bite thing and you really did make it somehting more, which I loved. When you read the scene, it really is jsut words but the imagery made it so much more. I could "see" the emotion and everything. Loved it mucho, mucho mucho. I am not Spanish. Well this is certainly an odd way to end a review. But really, I loved it, and I can't believe it's over. sniff. *contemplates reading Bugs again...*