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Omg you don't know how much your story rox!!! u really dont know how much!!! XD

Victoria Violet: I can't e-mail the answer because your address is hidden in the review. So all I can do is post it here; I hope you see it. I don't recall ever saying that Hiei would lose the Jagan if Yukina found him out. Other stories have claimed that, but I don't buy into it. Hiei, in my story, hid his identity because he did not want Yukina to know she had a murderous felon for a brother. Hope that clears it up.

mhmartini

I have a question from earlier in the story. You said that Hiei would lose his Jagan if his sister found out who her brother is right? Well he never lost it. Is there a reason for this or is this one of those "it just is" scenarios? I've read Coming Clean, Switching, and Bugs and it is never explained. If you have the time could you e-mail me with the answer. I'm curious about why he never lost it. Anyways, Ja ne!

Victoria Violet

“This is my husband, Hatanaka Kazuya, and I am Shiori. Shuuichi Minamino is my son.”
Well, _that's_ special! Make up your mind whether you're going to use the surname or the given name first!

This story is pretty decent so far, except that you just did something that is one of my biggest pet peeves: you referred to Hiei's third eye as "jagan eye." Now, I understand that this isn't your fault, it's the fault of the idiotic commercial translators, but that doesn't change the fact that the term "jagan eye" is completely and utterly _redundant_, since "jagan" alone means "evil eye," the "gan" literally translating as "eyeball" (and "ja" means "evil" obviously), so tacking an additional english "eye" onto the end of it...well...you get my point.

*bows in awe*

Wonderful story. God plot, and nice the way you didn't carbon copy others. Great Job.

Wow. This story is something else. You really made me cry with the torture you put Kurama and Hiei through. *sniffles* Eh weel, it was a really great story, I look forward to more wonderful stories.

im on chapter 7 right now and this story is amazing!! you write so beautifully except that Kurama is the wounded one Poor Kurama!!! but great story!!

Review for chapters 20-23:

At least Kazuya wasn't an ass when they brought Kurama home ^__^ Poor Hiei! But at least Intaro did not break his mind or spirit. But still, I pity him, not even being able to go to the bathroom on his own- I really do not think that I could stand that, except, like Hiei, if perhaps it was someone close, EXTREMELY close, helping.... I hope he recovers soon.

Oh man, I'm so far behind. *groans* You want to know how far behind I am? I just finished reading chapter 19. *waits for flying miscellaneous objects* I'm sorry! Really I am! I do admit that I've been rather self-absorbed lately fic-wise, posting mine but not reading others. I've really missed reading this, but now I've found time to! Yay!

The ending of this chapter, all that stuff that Intaro was saying, was... amazing. Extremely warped and creepy, mind you, but poetic in its own way too. I liked it- I really think you wrote him well, very Karasu-ish, as I'm sure you intended ^__^ I look forward to seeing what happens next- which I believe I'll go find out now XD