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February 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I just what to say. THANK YOU SO MUCH! I love how it starting! I can't wait for the next chapter! hehehe I love the way kazuma and hiei fight but I can't help but think that they are just beating around the bush. Thank you, for making this Hiei/Kazuma fic. Thought I wonder what Kurama going to do see how Hiei is his lover not Kazuma. hehehe I can't wait, please come out with the next chapter soon. Thank you so much! But I want to ask you something, if you could change Kazuma to a witch, vampire, or half human half tiger which would it be? and again thank you. *Bows down*
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February 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The plot of the story is a little fast, but it's going alright. But, I got confused a few times when there should ahve been a comma after or before some text, and there wasn't. It got confusing some, but I managed to figure it out. You might want to see about someone betaing your story. I liked it, and I didn't see any major spelling errors, but the biggest thing was the punctuation. But, I really can't talk, because I'm the Mistake Queen! *smiles* I make lots of mistakes, so I can't really say anything to you. *shrugs* But if it's a good, honest review you're looking for, here it is! *smiles* I do hope that you continue this story. Cookies for you! ~Ys
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February 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is such a wonderful start. You had me laughing my butt off from the dialogue. You are very funny. I enjoyed the whole dream sequence, it was really unique and different. I'm looking very, very forward to seeing how you get Kuwa and Hiei together. Good luck