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I can't believe I got dropped like this. I feel so incomplete. Help me. End this story right!

Hey there YuYu. I finally got around to reading this uber long story of doom! For the most part I liked it, your plot lines and scenarios kept me well entertained; though I did run into a few problems. Your grammar, for one, needs to be looked over and revised, I noticed quite a few spelling errors and some words just didn't fit certain sentences. I highly suggest getting a BETA and reposting the revised chapters. Please note that it's nothing to be ashamed of, I am doing to same thing with my fanfic Trials of a Youkai's Heart. In fact I don't know a single serious writer who doesn't go over their work time and time again, fixing little problems and getting others to look over their work for them. It really is quite common. Another small thing that bothered me was a few of the garbled facts in here in reference to the show. While it is true that Kurama did go back and work for Yomi in the Makai Saga such was not always the case. Yomi was in fact Youko Kurama's second in command before being attacked by an assasin hired by Youko due to his incompitence. Also, Yomi already has an heir, a son named Shura. Though I am willing to go lax on that, you needed to ignore that little detail for your plot line. Other than those things though I considered this entire fic to be a pretty good read and I cannot wait to go off and see the rest of this story.

I just finished the story, and i had to tell you i loved it!!!! You just write too good!! (it' s not like i'm complaining!!) i also had to say that you're a real mean girl!! How can you let the story there?? Now i can´t wait to read the rest, and i´ll have to come check every day to see if there's something.
i also wanted to say that it was really good that karasu couldn´t get kurama, i don´t like when he does. (he´s always really bad on the fics. i have never watched that part of the show, and i already hate him!)
Well, i hope we´ll know from you really soon!!!
Please keep on writing!!

sorry!! I just noticed i wrote karasu instead of yomi. (well, they´re both really mean, they love making kurama suffer)

hey,you did stap write this fic,didn't you???.please,don't do that,I beg you.please,continue to write,ne???.hic hic

I loved this story. It is very enthralling, and once I started reading I was hooked. I am very much looking forward to the next installment.

I will read the next story! I was almost getting scared that it was the end. They are going to have babies!, I think. I hope they are! I do not have a problem with m-preg, it's something I like to read. If I got the wrong idea from this chapter about babies, then I'm sorry. I hope you update soon!
Sincerely Mea ^_^

I really love your story. I'm glad it doesn't end there b/c that is a very sad ending. I applogize for not reviewing earlier and I have no good excuse for it, besides jsut being lazy. Keep up your hard work and if you don't find a beta reader I will be more than happy to help you.

I was happy to see an update went to it read it half way and couldn't believe you'd leave it
like that.Alittle up set I finished reading and was happy you said you'd continue it(hope so)
Although why you can't finish it here I don't understand.I'll keep a look out for the next part,
Just a note but we all know Kurama loves Hiei yet you let him forget he remarked him and Hiei
doesn't lie to Kurama ever.What up with that

when i first saw the title i freaked and thought i was going to die! poor kurama....i would comfort him but he belong to hiei. i will read your continuation!!