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October 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Im loving your story, im a big fan of Yuusuke/Kurama, but this chapter made me twitch a bit. There's no way Yuusuke wouldn't know what 'Kami' are, unless he isn't Japanese in this story. sorry, but i really felt i should point that out.
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October 14, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow i finally found time to sit down and read this story and im so glad i did. i loved the chapter i see kurama is sneaky.
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May 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this story is so good. it has been plaguing my thoughts for the past couple days that i have been reading it. i can't wait for the next instalment. i will be waiting patiently
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May 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey there.
Sometimes I'm appalled at the idiots on this site, and I really hope you ignore the two jerks (probably the same person even) who left such rude reviews. I personally think your fic is quite sweet. There is a little OOCness, but given the type of fic that it is, it probably couldn't be helped. One of the things you might want to do is give Kurama a little more of a backbone, I think, since it is out of character for him to be the 'damsel in distress'. Also, Hiei is a little more surly, and a LOT less emotional, Yusuke started off being OOC (unsure of himself and a little shy), but you now have him fairly well. Overall, I've enjoyed what you have so far, and please don't let anyone put you off writing - especially idiots who are too chicken to even leave thier email addresses.
L8r,
Julie
Sometimes I'm appalled at the idiots on this site, and I really hope you ignore the two jerks (probably the same person even) who left such rude reviews. I personally think your fic is quite sweet. There is a little OOCness, but given the type of fic that it is, it probably couldn't be helped. One of the things you might want to do is give Kurama a little more of a backbone, I think, since it is out of character for him to be the 'damsel in distress'. Also, Hiei is a little more surly, and a LOT less emotional, Yusuke started off being OOC (unsure of himself and a little shy), but you now have him fairly well. Overall, I've enjoyed what you have so far, and please don't let anyone put you off writing - especially idiots who are too chicken to even leave thier email addresses.
L8r,
Julie
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May 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love Kurama/Yuusuke fics and will willingly read anything I can get my greedy paws on. Now, that being said, a small piece of advice for you. Be careful when you're writing because you're attempting a story in the First Person mode (i.e. 'I saw the laughter on Julie's face' as opposed to 'He saw the laughter on Julie's face').
You seem to be mixing the two together, so you need to keep a careful eye on the two writing styles.
You seem to be mixing the two together, so you need to keep a careful eye on the two writing styles.
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May 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I dunno how to take this fic... it's written wall, but it is very syrupy, and the characters are all way OUT of character. Mostly Yusuke and Hiei though. Kurama in your fic is such a... for lack of a better word, "queen". Actually, NONE of the characters have the hard cold edge that they should have. Have you even watched YYH beyond the first 'ghost files' arc?
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May 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
everyone is very out of character - yusuke especially.
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January 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I like this...it's sweet. I like the spirit descriptions...though, isn't Kurama's spirit form Youko? But, then, that's the license of creativity, so never mind. Anyway, I enjoyed it :D
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January 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ooohhh that whole chapter was so poetic and passionate i could practical feel the emotions of yusuke. also will i see some lovin between yusuke and kurama of course if i do can kurama be on top since yusuke all innocent and shy in this area.
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December 30, 2004 at 12:00 AM
that is so sweet its about time yusuke has fallen accepted his feelings for kurama.