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by Ametank

person Dark Priestess
schedule November 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Once again I'm reviewing to tell you what a great writter you are! Thanks for the lemon ^_~ Post the next chapter soon!
person Zigs
schedule November 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
great chapter ^-^ i hope you update soon, okay? You did good for your first second-person lemon ^-^ keep up the good work *gives Hiei plushie* Ciao! *dissappears*
person Shera
schedule November 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Please email me when you update this story, I realy like it^_^.
person Dani
schedule November 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh god, that was great. Please update really soon. Great lemon also. You should do another *winkwink*
person animegirl007
schedule November 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
It was a great lemon....I love Hiei, but I never think about him as a lover....you did a really good job, it's so Hiei......I know Hiei is Hiei but he should be a little more nicer to me.....Are we going to fall in love soon????? UPDATE SOON
person Serena
schedule November 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
hey i read it and i have to say i loved it!^^ to be quite honest with you out of all the lemon i've read it was the best up date as soon as you can. you can email me yet again when you've upd. id. i'l be waiting

thankies ^^*""""""""""""
hiei: you have to shut up onna! *takes out katana*
yuyusailor13: i guest u don`t want sweet snow, it's all for me then *starts eating*
hiei: drop my sweet snow onna *walks toward serena a.k.a yuyusailor13*
serena: hiei if try anything i'll tell yukina that your her long lost brother *smirks*
hiei: *sweetdrops*
serena: oh hiei of coarse i'll give you sweet snow! *hands hiei a bowl of sweet snow*
hiei: *starts ending* up......date or i'll you you! *unshelths katana*
serena: hiei put the katana away! *serena puts it away for him*
*kurama walks in*
kurama: hiei, serena what are you two doing here.
*serena and hiei look at eachother confused*
yusuke: yeah were you 2 planning to do something!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
kuwabara: urameshi please don't make me think about that stuff, it will be scary to serena and hiei doing something or even doing anything together!
botan: serena spill. =^_^='''''''''''''' meow
*hiei and serstarstart chasing everyone*
botan,yusuke, kurama, kuwabara: up date!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh............wahhhhhhhhhh
hiei and serena: GET BACK HERE BAKAS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
person tryxi
schedule November 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
great story so far. love it. pls send me a email when u update i want to keep up w/ this story. :) hugs
person denise
schedule November 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
coolness! update soon! made me go: O.O while reading it lol
person Neoki Jaganshi
schedule November 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
yay lemon with hiei-sama great chapter by the way i cant wait for the next this is the one thing getting me through school (don't asl how) update soon!
person Asilin
schedule November 4, 2004 at 12:00 AM
YAY!!! LEMONY-GOODNESS!!! can't wait to see how hiei handles his "dominance issues." LOL. neway, can't wait till you update!