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by Ametank

person Tabi
schedule February 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ah darling, it was lovely! I'm still really pleased with the twist on the "straw that broke the camel's back" thing... Love it. Can't wait to read more ^_^
schedule February 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was good! That Hiei! He makes me so mad, sometimes! I can't believe I did that too a tree! I'm glad I found out something that was going on with me. Please update soon. I want to find out what my brother and his friend are planning, and I know it's not good. "P < that's suppose to be sticking my tongue out
person AsanoMatsuya
schedule January 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I've been completely sucked into this. I have to applaud you on that because there are so few authors nowadays that have the talent to do that! ^_^ I can't wait to read the next chapter!!
person Redbells
schedule January 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
HEY! ITS ME ^__^.

I DIDN'T GET TO READ THE LAST TWO CHAPTERS TILL JUST NOW -- SCHOOL HAS ME IN LOCK AND CHAIN UNFORTUNITLY.

BUT TO REAL BUSSINESS......I TOTALY LOVED THAT *GIGGLES* I REALLY REALLY LOVED THAT. IM GOING CRAZY TO KNO WHAT HIEI WILL ASK FOR? I CANT BELIVE HE GO ON HIS KNEE'S......O__O THAT WAS DEFFINETLY MUCH A SUPRISE.

I HAVENT HAD MUCH TO DO LATLEY.........I HAVENT EVEN BEEN ABLE TO GET ON THE COMPUTER MUCH. IM GANNA START A MANGA SERIES TO OCCUPY MY TIME, I LOVE ANIME! HEHEHE. ANIME ROCKZ!
person Hiei Lonewolf
schedule January 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
"Hn... Arigatou for informing me what you meant. In the back of my mind, I knew, but it did not quite register exactly. So far so good, with Hiei submitting to the wishes. Although I sort of fear what he has planned. Do continue."
Hiei Lonewolf
person Aeri
schedule January 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yay!!! I can't believe I found your awesome fanfic here!!!! *does happy dance* It looks like your even further along on this site then e-fiction, XD. Please update soon! ^0^
person inugirl5
schedule January 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yay!! This is sooo much fun to read! I love it sooo much!!
person Asilin
schedule January 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
NO!!! Evil cliffie! a very good, well-placed cliffie, but evil nontheless. *growls* why'd you have to stop there???? please, please, please update soon!
person Serena
schedule January 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i loved it!!!! omg, i can't wait to find out what happens next, i wonder what hiei's gonna ask me..............
(hiei walks in)
hiei: what do i have to ask you onna?
Serena: ooooooooo nuthin, it's just about a fanfic
hiei: hn.
(yusuke and kuwabara walk in)
yusuke: yeah!, hiei you should of read what the fanfic said about you and serena getting it on, if you know what i mean........~_*
hiei: what do you mean?...........serena?
serena: uh....... um. arh..... don't ASK ME EHEHHEHHEHEHEH!...........
kuwabara: oooo yeah you should of read hiei, it was disgusting, you and serena were doin the hanky panky......
hiei: i am no sex object, serena ............!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
( kurama and the rest of the group walk in)
kurama: hiei you misunderstood, you see, it's a fanfic, as you do the group of the urameshi team are famous, and the girls establish a fanfictionfor us, to kind of let their dreams come true, in writing. and the type of fanfiction serena was reading was youxhiei, so it's not really real..........
hiei: hn.
serena: yeah you see i would never think of you that way,..................^O^' he doesn't know me very well, do he........heheh heh '
hiei: 'i can read your mind onna'
serena: 'hi hiei..............'
botan: well lets go party
yusuke: why, koenma is finally gettin off that pacifier, hehahaha
kuwabara: yeah, i was thinking when he's getting off of that.........
keiko: yusuke even though i have to agree with you, he's still your boss
kurama: well then shall we go?
serena: Wait! i gotta send this email...........then put my computer in standby........*gets goin*
hiei: come on onna,.................
serena: i'm comin i'm comin,..
*types*: hey update as soon as you can, hiei can sometimes be a jerk, but i love him, heheh hehehe
thankies
serena: let's go hiei........*grabs his arm,..........and kisses him on the cheek*
hiei: *blushes* hn.
serena: oooooo hiei you look sooooooo cute, you don't have to be blushing, your with me only
*serena and hiei leave the room*
person Dark Priestess
schedule January 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Who woulda thought Hiei would swallow his pride for two seconds. Maybe he CAN be decent sometimes. ^_^ I love him either way.