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for The Betrayal

by vampmistress76

schedule December 8, 2004 at 12:00 AM
aww what a sweet ending, good job!
person Miya
schedule December 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Nice chapter! Can't wait till the next one! :D
person Kaori
schedule December 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hi ya! I really enjoyed this part of "The Betrayal." Indeed, it made me sad at times, but it was nice. I can't wait till you write the next part for "The Betrayal." If you do and have time, please email me. I'm always busy, so often I don't have time to check. Also I would gladly appreciate it if you did. Thank you very much. ~Kaori.
person black_neko16
schedule November 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I think Keiko should try to use the dragon...........just a thought. Anyway I really love your story, great plot! I have never read a H/K/K story before and I think this one is great! Update as soon as possible, I know you have a lot of other stories that you are working on.
schedule November 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hot, hot story. Very well written. Great lemon between Hiei/Kurama/Keiko. I like how you explained Yusuke's feelings towards Keiko, that he really thought she was the one when he had sex with her. That he didn't use her. The person I am pissed at is Botan. I think she is such a bitch. She was supposed to be Keiko's friend and then betrays her as well. Sorry. I just hate when girls steal other girls boyfriends or husbands. I am glad that it all worked out in the end for everybody, so far at least. Can't wait for more. Please hurry.
person Katzztar
schedule November 24, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Keiko wondered how would Kuwabra act? Simple he would want to beat Yusuke up. Kazuma got Yusuke in a headlock when he first met Botan, threatening him that he better not be cheating on Keiko. I think Kazuma Kuwabara sees Keiko as a surrogate younger sister.

Hiei-Kieko-Kurama

Yusuke-Botan

Now the only other pairing that needs to happen is Kazuma-Yukina. Now that Hiei is mated and feels what it's like to love someone unconditionally, I whould hope he wouldn't object to Kazuma being with his sister.
person Lea-chan
schedule November 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Still so so good! I loved that chapter. Update more frequently! argh!
I cannot wait to see what happeneds, will she become pregnant?! omg! haha..eh
whos kid will it be? Eh... *confused, but happy*

Kurama is soo hoooooooooot! *drools*
person kuramasbluegurl
schedule November 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
ohhhhhh nicely done
man all your fanfics are good
your very talented
thanks for the great read
person LC
schedule October 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
That was ... so good! Argh! You rock o.O;;
*bows in deep respect before the hentai master*

~sigh~
person Ymanetta
schedule September 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Girl you know you need to continue this story. And make them have something like a threesome, or what happends when everyone finds out.