rate_review Reviews

You've got some good ideas, but the way you write interfraers with the story. It's very choppy and rushed, and in some places it's hard to tell who's talking. Kepp working, you get better with pratice.

This story has caught my interest. Please update. Oh yeah, Why were Yusuke and Kurama fighting in the beginning. Were they just playing around? Anyway, I like your story and hope to read more. ^_^ *is waiting for update* XD

So you wrote this! I might've reviewed before had I known it was you. I like KuramaXYusuke better than anything else. Like I said before, I can beta... probably because I'm stuck on my own stories and I'm bored. I can fix, add and all the other editing stuff.

Hmmm....interesting....more please!! ^_^

Please continue. This story could be really good. So far its really confusing but that kina makes it interesting. I really want to see what happens next. Update soon! Thanx = )

I have no idea what's going on. You should get someone to beta for you, but also can you explain what is going with chapters one and two? They don't make any sense or flow with each other. I would love to see improvements on this story because it sounds interesting.^^

Good story! Do continue! ^_^

It might be interesting, but you need a beta. The syntax is t oft off, though I've seen worse, and it seemed rather rushed. It could use some fleshing out. Also, what in the world is going on? Why were they fighting? Why was a crowd watching? Why did Hie get involved, and why did Kurama seem to want him to? Why was the day so bad just because Yusuke had a lot of homework, which he doesn't usually bother with anyway? Even if it's supposed to be a cliffhanger, it would still be nice to have a bit more insight into their thoughts at the moment so we can at least make some guesses as to what's happening and why. Keep working on it. I'd love to see more Kurama/Yusuke stories.