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for When Death Becomes You

by poisoninyoureyes

person lunasherasha
schedule June 8, 2004 at 12:00 AM
this is a nice fic and I want to know what happens and if your still on here I why hvent ypu posed yet but other than that good fic
person Shadows Call
schedule May 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Not a bad story idea, though it is a bit short. If you spent a little more time describing the area, or the acts, and made it more than one paragraph (as in stopping one paragraph then starting another when different people talk) the'd 'd be an excellent story.

Keep up the good work, I'm looking forward to more.